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  • Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
  • Theme: Horror
  • Subject: Ghost Stories / Paranormal
  • Published: 10/06/2018

I WILL COME BACK...

By Abhiram ghotkar
Born 2005, M, from Pune maharashtra, India

I WILL COME BACK….

It was a beautiful summer morning,I woke up from my bed,got a cup of beer and I got a call from my friend. He asked for a movie plan tonight and also not a any other but a horror movie ..so as you know I am brave not soft but brave hearted ferocious citizen I said yes, but before that I checked my busy schedule because you know I am a really busy sophisticated sincere billionaire hardworker passionate loyal handsome jawlined person but still I took some time out. I was really excited to see the horror movie.
So all the friends came to the multiplex being excited we came together carpooling(now you would think who gave this idea,it was none other than this sincere inteliigent billionaire environmental caring ……I don’t think I need to explain my qualities again) . so we took our tickets and sat on our seats with a ton of popcorn but we were freaked because there was no one except some oldies with dead hearts and some kids with mental problems so we were happy that the whole hall is ours except those freaks but we were a little scared too except me offcourse..the movie started and along with the movie my friends teeth began to chatter because of fear but I wasn’t that scared. At the end of the movie at the last scene even the braveheart (me) got scared and my friends caramel popcorn got busters and landed on the one of the oldies hair all sticky and sweet she started shouting you popcorn rascals and we all laughed .
In one of the scenes was that a group of friends were going in a car in the middle of night and suddenly a woman with long hair red eyes white dress came asking for ride they rejected and they rushed but she began chasing them .She jumped and landed on the top and she screamed loudly,broke the glass of windows and killed everyone…we saw the movie and decided to go while going it was about 11 pm . Suddenly we saw a young lady for a ride.One of my friends told her to sit in and we drived.She was a little weird she was moving her neck with jerks in awkard manner and she had red nailpaints and a black dress with a red dyed long hair and green eyes..we drove her to her house and we drived ahead .We were driving driving and driving but still there wasn’t a single turn which was supposed to be there .Google maps started screaming ALERT! ALERT! We thought it must be technical issues and ignored. Then the main sequence started we saw the same girl that was in the movie she came ahead we went back she took 2 steps we moved back little,she took 4 steps we moved a little more back,she took 10 steps we moved more back.Every step was freaking scary then she started running we started racing back, we planned to kill her and we accelerated ahead but when she touched the car her aura came inside and what the hell!! She was in the car suddenly blood splashed on the front glass she started laughing we started crying she went in me she said I like you ( finally I am a billionaire intelligent handsome jawlined person) but still she went in me and controlled me but due to my brave aura I pushed her back she took a knife out her pocket and stabbed on one of my friends I got scared for first time everyone started running to their home I did it too
.Everyone went to their home but I was the most unlucky was me because my flat was at the most top and no one was there except me alone in the house ..i was sweating a lot I went to my home locked the door tightly and started to sleep I played some music but suddenly a voice came “you are caught, try to survive” and music volume changed too high that it bursted my ears suddenly fan started moving ,microwave turned on ,bell started ringing and television turned on turned off ,off on off on,I was so scared but still I was calm suddenly a creaky voice of door came and she appeared with a knife I got scared but I knew how to control ghosts I ran from the house and went to terrace there I made a specific symbol by my hands and put a candle in middle and enchanted some mantras she came and said there wont be any effect she came near me with her knife.Her knife was thirsty for my blood .
She enchanted a spell and she took me too a really scary and frightening place.It was covered with spider nets,it smelt like a ton of dead bodies were kep the walls were painted by blood of redhands it was all dark and the floor was wet by blood.She came near me and showed me the corpses of dead bodies thrown.she took her knife out and started peircing m skin slowly and i shouted "Gossgreg krytion maends siup" she started screaming and i shouted with all my strenght.It worked the local black magician told me this mantra and it woked i shouted and she started disppearing. Her last words were,"i will come back".....

-Abhiram Ghotkar

I WILL COME BACK...(abhiram ghotkar) I WILL COME BACK….

It was a beautiful summer morning,I woke up from my bed,got a cup of beer and I got a call from my friend. He asked for a movie plan tonight and also not a any other but a horror movie ..so as you know I am brave not soft but brave hearted ferocious citizen I said yes, but before that I checked my busy schedule because you know I am a really busy sophisticated sincere billionaire hardworker passionate loyal handsome jawlined person but still I took some time out. I was really excited to see the horror movie.
So all the friends came to the multiplex being excited we came together carpooling(now you would think who gave this idea,it was none other than this sincere inteliigent billionaire environmental caring ……I don’t think I need to explain my qualities again) . so we took our tickets and sat on our seats with a ton of popcorn but we were freaked because there was no one except some oldies with dead hearts and some kids with mental problems so we were happy that the whole hall is ours except those freaks but we were a little scared too except me offcourse..the movie started and along with the movie my friends teeth began to chatter because of fear but I wasn’t that scared. At the end of the movie at the last scene even the braveheart (me) got scared and my friends caramel popcorn got busters and landed on the one of the oldies hair all sticky and sweet she started shouting you popcorn rascals and we all laughed .
In one of the scenes was that a group of friends were going in a car in the middle of night and suddenly a woman with long hair red eyes white dress came asking for ride they rejected and they rushed but she began chasing them .She jumped and landed on the top and she screamed loudly,broke the glass of windows and killed everyone…we saw the movie and decided to go while going it was about 11 pm . Suddenly we saw a young lady for a ride.One of my friends told her to sit in and we drived.She was a little weird she was moving her neck with jerks in awkard manner and she had red nailpaints and a black dress with a red dyed long hair and green eyes..we drove her to her house and we drived ahead .We were driving driving and driving but still there wasn’t a single turn which was supposed to be there .Google maps started screaming ALERT! ALERT! We thought it must be technical issues and ignored. Then the main sequence started we saw the same girl that was in the movie she came ahead we went back she took 2 steps we moved back little,she took 4 steps we moved a little more back,she took 10 steps we moved more back.Every step was freaking scary then she started running we started racing back, we planned to kill her and we accelerated ahead but when she touched the car her aura came inside and what the hell!! She was in the car suddenly blood splashed on the front glass she started laughing we started crying she went in me she said I like you ( finally I am a billionaire intelligent handsome jawlined person) but still she went in me and controlled me but due to my brave aura I pushed her back she took a knife out her pocket and stabbed on one of my friends I got scared for first time everyone started running to their home I did it too
.Everyone went to their home but I was the most unlucky was me because my flat was at the most top and no one was there except me alone in the house ..i was sweating a lot I went to my home locked the door tightly and started to sleep I played some music but suddenly a voice came “you are caught, try to survive” and music volume changed too high that it bursted my ears suddenly fan started moving ,microwave turned on ,bell started ringing and television turned on turned off ,off on off on,I was so scared but still I was calm suddenly a creaky voice of door came and she appeared with a knife I got scared but I knew how to control ghosts I ran from the house and went to terrace there I made a specific symbol by my hands and put a candle in middle and enchanted some mantras she came and said there wont be any effect she came near me with her knife.Her knife was thirsty for my blood .
She enchanted a spell and she took me too a really scary and frightening place.It was covered with spider nets,it smelt like a ton of dead bodies were kep the walls were painted by blood of redhands it was all dark and the floor was wet by blood.She came near me and showed me the corpses of dead bodies thrown.she took her knife out and started peircing m skin slowly and i shouted "Gossgreg krytion maends siup" she started screaming and i shouted with all my strenght.It worked the local black magician told me this mantra and it woked i shouted and she started disppearing. Her last words were,"i will come back".....

-Abhiram Ghotkar

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Hadsss

11/21/2018

good effort but grammar needs to be focused on....best of luck

good effort but grammar needs to be focused on....best of luck

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JD

10/06/2018

Good punctuation is very important for readers. If you do not have good punctuation, it makes your story very difficult to read and appreciate. No matter how good your story telling ability may be, if you not have proper punctuation, grammar and spelling, readers will not be able to fully understand nor appreciate your story. That is why you have been rated 2 stars.

Good punctuation is very important for readers. If you do not have good punctuation, it makes your story very difficult to read and appreciate. No matter how good your story telling ability may be, if you not have proper punctuation, grammar and spelling, readers will not be able to fully understand nor appreciate your story. That is why you have been rated 2 stars.

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