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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Mystery
- Published: 06/28/2020
Four Doors
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You are in the center of a small round room. You look around. The walls are made of wood. There's a lot of dust on them. The corners of the room are full of cobwebs. A spider crawls up to his web, to eat an insect which is trapped in it. The ground is damp and is covered with a layer of blue-green algae. A mosquito is hovering...
"Shut up your nonsense and say what is necessary," You shout. Yeah yeah am coming to the point.
There are four doors around you. On each door a sentence is written:
Door 1: "This door leads to death."
Door 2: "This door leads to hell."
Door 3: "This door leads to eternity."
Door 4: "This door leads to the dark world."
You are thinking. Which one should you choose? Obviously you won't choose hell and death. But you aren't understanding the sentences on Door 3 and Door 4. 'This leads to eternity.' What does that mean? Will it lead you to an eternal life? But what if it leads you to eternal grief? Eternal pain? Eternal sufferings? Eternal, but what?
Coming to the fourth door, you've never heard of 'dark world'. You don't know what it means. You are puzzled.
You may be wondering how you got inside the room. You don't know. And I don't know. That doesn't matter. All that matters is that now you are stuck inside and you want to get out. You are thinking. You run your fingers through your hair.
"Can you please stop speaking? Let me concentrate."
I am explaining it to the reader. How will he/she understand the story if I don't narrate? Let me speak. You mind your own business.
"Okay." You say.
You notice something written on the ceiling. It's written in huge red letters. Maybe with blood. You read:
"There are four sentences written on the doors. One sentence on each door, respectively. Note that two of the statements are true and two of them are false."
Goddamit! All this is getting more complicated. You are more confused now. You look around. You see an iron rod in a corner. You pick it up. Wait! Iron rod? From where? It wasn't the part of my story...
You pick the iron rod and walk towards a wall.
Me: Wait wait what the hell is going on? This is cheating! You have to go out through one of the door. It's a rule.
You: *lifts the rod* Shut up, let me do my work.
Me: But... But, this is my story and I'll decide what you have to do.
You: *about to hit the wall* Hahaha...You stay here stupid narrator.
Me: Nooooooo!
You: *Hits the wall with iron rod*
(The wooden wall cracks open and you go out of the room with an evil laugh.)
Me: *sobs* Why does every story of mine end up with me getting in trouble?
Four Doors(Pratik)
You are in the center of a small round room. You look around. The walls are made of wood. There's a lot of dust on them. The corners of the room are full of cobwebs. A spider crawls up to his web, to eat an insect which is trapped in it. The ground is damp and is covered with a layer of blue-green algae. A mosquito is hovering...
"Shut up your nonsense and say what is necessary," You shout. Yeah yeah am coming to the point.
There are four doors around you. On each door a sentence is written:
Door 1: "This door leads to death."
Door 2: "This door leads to hell."
Door 3: "This door leads to eternity."
Door 4: "This door leads to the dark world."
You are thinking. Which one should you choose? Obviously you won't choose hell and death. But you aren't understanding the sentences on Door 3 and Door 4. 'This leads to eternity.' What does that mean? Will it lead you to an eternal life? But what if it leads you to eternal grief? Eternal pain? Eternal sufferings? Eternal, but what?
Coming to the fourth door, you've never heard of 'dark world'. You don't know what it means. You are puzzled.
You may be wondering how you got inside the room. You don't know. And I don't know. That doesn't matter. All that matters is that now you are stuck inside and you want to get out. You are thinking. You run your fingers through your hair.
"Can you please stop speaking? Let me concentrate."
I am explaining it to the reader. How will he/she understand the story if I don't narrate? Let me speak. You mind your own business.
"Okay." You say.
You notice something written on the ceiling. It's written in huge red letters. Maybe with blood. You read:
"There are four sentences written on the doors. One sentence on each door, respectively. Note that two of the statements are true and two of them are false."
Goddamit! All this is getting more complicated. You are more confused now. You look around. You see an iron rod in a corner. You pick it up. Wait! Iron rod? From where? It wasn't the part of my story...
You pick the iron rod and walk towards a wall.
Me: Wait wait what the hell is going on? This is cheating! You have to go out through one of the door. It's a rule.
You: *lifts the rod* Shut up, let me do my work.
Me: But... But, this is my story and I'll decide what you have to do.
You: *about to hit the wall* Hahaha...You stay here stupid narrator.
Me: Nooooooo!
You: *Hits the wall with iron rod*
(The wooden wall cracks open and you go out of the room with an evil laugh.)
Me: *sobs* Why does every story of mine end up with me getting in trouble?
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Kanishka Roy
08/02/2020I loved how you hinted at a great paradox but I was feeling disappointed that it'll go the same way many similar stories go- but this unique and interesting. Keep writing.....your ideas are commendable!
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Pratik
08/02/2020Thanks Kanishka. Glad to know that you liked the idea. Receiving a comment from you means a lot to me!
:-)
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Thestorytelleralf
07/15/2020congrats i am in love with my story, in fact probably my favorite story on the website
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Hafsa bint-e-rashid
07/01/2020I wish we could play a game of truth and dare
I dunno if it sounds childish to you but I am NOT an AUNTY
I still am a girl, a teenage girl and I really like playing games like;
Never have I ever
Truth or dare
Would you rather
and so on..
can I know your username on Wattpad
I have tried on kik and they are giving me this PIN problem which i don't know how to figure it out....
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Pratik
07/01/2020Pin problem? You can login without creating a pin. I can't help you because I don't know what's going on in your device. Have you tried taking help from Youtube?
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Chaitali
06/29/2020interseting! i think i would have chosen the door to the "dark world". why? i dont know myself.
pratik by the way the "you" in the story i think if it would me i would have be the same *laughs*
----------cheers:)
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Helsa
06/29/2020That was a hilarious ending!
I really like your stories and am glad that you won't stop me laughing.
Keep writing. Regards;
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Pratik
06/29/2020Keep laughing. Don't read my stories at night or the witches will come to visit you after hearing your laughter.
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Hafsa bint-e-rashid
06/28/2020WITHOUT THINKING I would've entered the dark world
I GUESS IT WOULDN'T HAVE BEEN THAT DIFFERENT FROM OURS...
OR MAYBE ETERNITY cuz if It's pain or grief, I'd love to feel pain and grief as i always do so
UMM HAVE I SAID AND SPILLED OUT TOO MUCH???
BUT ONCE AGAIN SIRR
GREAT JOB INDEED!!!!
THE ROOM YOU DESCRIBED WAS COMPLETELY AWESOME
I MEAN THE WAY YOU DESCRIBED IT!!
THUMBS UP, PRATIK FOR YAA
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Helsa
06/29/2020Hey Hafsa!! We are waiting for you!!! You can access kik in a laptop but you must dow load the app. The only thing is you cant access it from your browser.
Hurry up! Join fast..we are waiting for you!
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