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Who's there?

By Aleena Nawaz
F, from Mianwali, Pakistan
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Who's there?

There was a spine-chilling thunderstorm outside, horrifying lightning followed by petrifying cloudburst. She saw a shadow. Someone was standing behind the curtain, long hair, eyes so bright and white that they were clearly visible. Out of nowhere, a glass fell on the floor. Someone tapped on her shoulder. She heard a hair-raising laughter. Suddenly the door opened viciously. She turned to see who is there and saw a woman dressed in red that ran towards her to kill her. She screamed, screamed very loud. suddenly she opened her eyes and realized it was just a nightmare.

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BEN BROWN

02/26/2023

Amazing! That was a great story. Well done.

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Shelly Garrod

01/20/2023

Outstandingly creepy! Nice work!
Blessings Shelly

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Dr. Albert Hunter

11/03/2022

Excellent

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Muzamil Khan

07/25/2020

Impressive. Excellent flash fiction.

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JD

07/25/2020

Nicely done flash fiction short, Aleena. Thanks for sharing your short stories on Storystar! :-)

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u so much :)

Hammad

07/25/2020

Amazing. Fantastic one.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Charles Walter

07/24/2020

What a supreme work of fiction! Brilliantly nailed it miss Aleena.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Dr-Noor khan

07/24/2020

Impressive. Best work as always. Very well done miss aleena. ❤

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Danish

07/24/2020

Good Work....

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Numan

07/24/2020

W8ing for next one ☺

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Numan

07/24/2020

Bravo

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Yasir shah

07/24/2020

exceptionally good

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Hasnain

07/23/2020

Creative thinking...
Outstanding work...

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Soniya sameer

07/23/2020

Artistic piece of writing.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/25/2020

Thank u!

Ijaz Ahmad

07/23/2020

Outstanding work

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Violet Cole

07/23/2020

Brilliant flash fiction. Remarkable.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Jameel

07/23/2020

wonderful. The fantastic Flash fiction. well done, Miss Aleena.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Zahid Ahmad

07/23/2020

Mind-blowing piece of fiction,miss Aleena. The choice of words is applaudable.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Jameel

07/23/2020

wonderful. The fantastic Flash fiction. well done, Miss Aleena.

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Sulman khan

07/23/2020

A beautiful fiction, beautiful piece of Art, u hve a GOD gifted ability to put ur thoughts on paper u should keep doing this..

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u for the appreciation.

Zahid Awan

07/23/2020

Maa sha Allah Outstanding ❤

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Kate Clarkson

07/23/2020

Top-notch and brilliant work of fiction.
Matchless.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Aziz

07/23/2020

A creative fiction. Outstanding piece of work

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Aziz

07/24/2020

It is my pleasure.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u so much sir for such sort of sublime appreciation. It is an honour for me that my Flash fiction has been appreciated by a great writer like you:)

Muhammad Ejaz

07/23/2020

It's the best flash fiction story i have ever read.. I say you are extraordinary and May Allah take you to peek of success and Prosperity and bless you with uncountable happiness.
Hat's off to you Aleena Nawaz

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Ahmad Sher

07/23/2020

Outstanding

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Hania Haider

07/23/2020

Aleena mam, I am your biggest fan. I have read your Horror short story "The abandoned road" it was awesome. And this flash fiction is also exceptional, supreme and first-class.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

O, thank u Hania:)

Awais munir

07/23/2020

Great, excellent

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u!

Zavier Clarkson

07/23/2020

Best flash fiction. I was thinking about reading something great stuff and found this, this is superb! I had read your Horror short story "The abandoned road " and it was excellent and interesting too. Great work.
Marvellous!

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u sir for the appreciation.

Kate Clarkson

07/23/2020

Impressive, a got goosebumps while reading it, I was repeatedly asking myself What will happen next? And thank God it was just a nightmare.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thanks :)

Mahnoor Mani

07/23/2020

Excellent

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u sir, it is an honor to have your comment on my flash fiction.

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Aleena Nawaz

07/23/2020

Thank u so much for such great words :)

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Muhammad Ashraf Shaheen

07/23/2020

A very thought provoking and creative story full of suspense and thematic approach. The diction is well suited and plot is well knet

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