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  • Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
  • Theme: Mystery
  • Subject: Mystery
  • Published: 09/09/2020

Our Daughter

By Pratik
Born 2004, M, from Maharashtra, India
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Our Daughter

She woke up to her daughter screaming out loud,

"Mummmmmmmy!"

Quickly, she sprinted towards her daughter's room. The little girl was lying at the corner of the room, panting, and holding her hands over her head, covering the face, as if she was trying to hide from somebody.

She hugged her and yelled,

"Sweety! Sweety! It's me! Mom has come! Don't worry! Calm down! Calm down! Relax! What happened?"

The little girl cried out loud, "Mummy! Mummy! There's someone roaming around in our house!"

Placing her over the chest and brushing her hands into the little girl's hair, she replied,

"No Sweety, there is no one! You just had a bad dream! Calm down! Stop crying! I'm there!"

Pointing towards the door, the little girl screamed, "Mom! There it is! See! Mummmmmmmy! There!"

She turned back to see a silhouette, holding a knife in hand. Her eyes went wide. She hugged her daughter all over and tried to scream out for help, but no words came out of her mouth.

It moved close to them, and looking into her eyes, it said,

"Sometimes, you have to listen to little kids! They speak truth!" And, stabbed her right into her heart with the knife.

She squealed, "Aaaaaaaahhhh!"

Her husband woke up and shouted,

"Hey! Hey! Relax! Calm down! May be you had a bad dream! Relax! Relax! Cool!"

She looked around, up and down, hugged her husband, and mumbled,

"Oh! That's a very bad dream!"

She got down the bed and moved towards her daughter's room. The little girl was still sleeping. She smiled, kissed her daughter on the forehead and returned to her bed.

Her husband asked, "Where did you go?"

She smilingly replied, "I just went to have a glance of our daughter, Sweety!"

He whispered, "Have you gone nuts? We don't have a daughter!"

Our Daughter(Pratik) She woke up to her daughter screaming out loud,

"Mummmmmmmy!"

Quickly, she sprinted towards her daughter's room. The little girl was lying at the corner of the room, panting, and holding her hands over her head, covering the face, as if she was trying to hide from somebody.

She hugged her and yelled,

"Sweety! Sweety! It's me! Mom has come! Don't worry! Calm down! Calm down! Relax! What happened?"

The little girl cried out loud, "Mummy! Mummy! There's someone roaming around in our house!"

Placing her over the chest and brushing her hands into the little girl's hair, she replied,

"No Sweety, there is no one! You just had a bad dream! Calm down! Stop crying! I'm there!"

Pointing towards the door, the little girl screamed, "Mom! There it is! See! Mummmmmmmy! There!"

She turned back to see a silhouette, holding a knife in hand. Her eyes went wide. She hugged her daughter all over and tried to scream out for help, but no words came out of her mouth.

It moved close to them, and looking into her eyes, it said,

"Sometimes, you have to listen to little kids! They speak truth!" And, stabbed her right into her heart with the knife.

She squealed, "Aaaaaaaahhhh!"

Her husband woke up and shouted,

"Hey! Hey! Relax! Calm down! May be you had a bad dream! Relax! Relax! Cool!"

She looked around, up and down, hugged her husband, and mumbled,

"Oh! That's a very bad dream!"

She got down the bed and moved towards her daughter's room. The little girl was still sleeping. She smiled, kissed her daughter on the forehead and returned to her bed.

Her husband asked, "Where did you go?"

She smilingly replied, "I just went to have a glance of our daughter, Sweety!"

He whispered, "Have you gone nuts? We don't have a daughter!"

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Francis Lai

09/19/2020

Just wondered if she really had a daughter. But she did kissed her daughter on her daughter's forehead. Just wondered whether her husband had gone nuts, instead. Let us continue on by replacing the last sentence and adding just one more paragraph.
He whispered, "She is alright then, is she?"
"Yes," she replied. "But that tree outside close to her window. That is the problem, dear....
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Just wondered if she really had a daughter. But she did kissed her daughter on her daughter's forehead. Just wondered whether her husband had gone nuts, instead. Let us continue on by replacing the last sentence and adding just one more paragraph.
He whispered, "She is alright then, is she?"
"Yes," she replied. "But that tree outside close to her window. That is the problem, dear. The wind blowing at the leaves did throw an image of a dark man, holding a knife in hand, and trying to stab someone. You really have to trim those leaves done tomorrow. Promise?"

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Pratik

09/20/2020

Oh my god! After reading your comment am like "Wish I could edit the story!"

Thanks for reading the story. Have a nice day.

Oh my god! After reading your comment am like "Wish I could edit the story!"

Thanks for reading the story. Have a nice day.

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ZachSmacks7

09/12/2020

Oh Pratik........ Finally!
What took you so long to come and wet my pants.

Oh Pratik........ Finally!
What took you so long to come and wet my pants.

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ZachSmacks7

09/12/2020

Well, that's fine.

Well, that's fine.

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Pratik

09/12/2020

Haha. I am sorry for your pants.

Well I wasn't getting in the mood to write stories.

Haha. I am sorry for your pants.

Well I wasn't getting in the mood to write stories.

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Riya

09/10/2020

I was reading it at night with my room closed and yeah .... I got goosebumps at the last part .... Really CREEPY !! You haunted again, Pratik!

I was reading it at night with my room closed and yeah .... I got goosebumps at the last part .... Really CREEPY !! You haunted again, Pratik!

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Pratik

09/10/2020

Thanks for reading and commenting. Feels good to have someone who reads your stories.

Thanks for reading and commenting. Feels good to have someone who reads your stories.

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Gail Moore

09/09/2020

Creepy, well done. Awesome story :-)

Creepy, well done. Awesome story :-)

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Pratik

09/10/2020

Thanks Gail. :-)

Thanks Gail. :-)

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Helsa

09/09/2020

Heya! That's another story that sends a shiver up into my spine. But this time, it's broad daylight so I don't need to switch on the lights! Hehehe...Great Job Pratik! Keep Writing;

Heya! That's another story that sends a shiver up into my spine. But this time, it's broad daylight so I don't need to switch on the lights! Hehehe...Great Job Pratik! Keep Writing;

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Helsa

09/11/2020

Nah..Greatfully it didn't!

Nah..Greatfully it didn't!

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Pratik

09/10/2020

Thanks. I hope no eclipse happens at your place.

Thanks. I hope no eclipse happens at your place.

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Arrow

09/09/2020

Wow! This is rly thrilling in such a morbid, haunting way! Amazing work! Very talented! :-O

Wow! This is rly thrilling in such a morbid, haunting way! Amazing work! Very talented! :-O

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Pratik

09/10/2020

*thank

*thank

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Pratik

09/10/2020

Thanks you again. You should've commented on that story.

Thanks you again. You should've commented on that story.

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Arrow

09/10/2020

Oh! & btw, I read your story abt the boy who finds the photo of the beatfiul girl...SO creative & haunting! Just wanted to tellu that! :-D

Oh! & btw, I read your story abt the boy who finds the photo of the beatfiul girl...SO creative & haunting! Just wanted to tellu that! :-D

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Hafsa bint-e-rashid

09/09/2020

THIS IS JUST SO AMAZING!!!

YET CREEPY..

THIS IS JUST SO AMAZING!!!

YET CREEPY..

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Hafsa bint-e-rashid

09/09/2020

So lame of yaa!

So lame of yaa!

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Pratik

09/09/2020

Thanks you Hafsa. Keep creeping...

Thanks you Hafsa. Keep creeping...

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Agata Montoya

09/09/2020

OMG! This story is INCREDIBLE, I love this type of story, Congratulations Pratik! You are a very good writer. :)

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OMG! This story is INCREDIBLE, I love this type of story, Congratulations Pratik! You are a very good writer. :)

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Pratik

09/09/2020

Thanks Agata. I'll believe it as its said by you.

Thank you for reading the story friend. :-)

Thanks Agata. I'll believe it as its said by you.

Thank you for reading the story friend. :-)

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