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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Kids
- Theme: Drama / Human Interest
- Subject: Loneliness / Solitude
- Published: 02/04/2021
Days Of Death
Born 2008, M, from Levin, New Zealand
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JD
02/07/2021I enjoyed your story, but it would be really nice if you would take the time and care to proofread and correct your writing before you submit your stories to the world of readers to be judged. Punctuation and proper English grammar and spelling can make a HUGE difference in whether a reader enjoys your story or not, or even whether they bother to read it. Normally i would not bother to read a story with so many errors, because it tells me that the writer does not care about their writing very much. So if they don't care, why should I? However, because of the subject of your story, and the fact it was very short, I decided to read it. As site admin, when I take the time to read a story I also make corrections to the story as I read... if I think it will help the story be better appreciated by other readers. I don't correct everything, just the things that help the story be easier to read and understand. Like adding periods at the end of sentences, and commas between parts of a sentence that are separate. So I did make a lot of corrections to this story as I read it. I think it will be easier for other readers to appreciate now. However, you should be the one to make the corrections to your own story before you publish it. You should do it for your reader's sake, and for your own too, if you want others to appreciate your story enough to give you a high rating. I hope you keep writing, but I also hope that you try your best to do better at fixing your writing mistakes so they don't prevent others from enjoying your stories.
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Gail Moore
02/07/2021Interesting story. I just saw a post on my FB from a friend that arrived in Auckland and police emerged onto the plane and escorted them all on to a bus heading for quarantine in the Waikato.
We are fairly buffeted in New Zealand from what is happening around the world. Aren’t we so lucky.
You put your story together well. A very long time in quarantine would drive anyone crazy.
Well done :-)
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