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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Horror / Scary
- Published: 02/12/2021
I am in the lobby.
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The taxi dropped me at the college gate at 5:20 in the morning. I was back to the college after 2 month long vacation, now going to be in the final year of my engineering. The guard was not at the gate, which was a bit unusual, but as it was still early morning, it seemed okay.
I started to walk towards my hostel which was around half kilometres from the gate. The vast campus of the college was covered in lush greenery and the cold breeze gave a very soothing feel.
Usually at this time some students as well as faculty can be seen jogging or walking their pets on the college road and the sweeper sweeping the streets, players practicing in the playground but none of them were there, not even a sound. All I could hear was the sound of leaves rustling, and birds tweeting.
It then occurred to me, what if the vacations got extended due to any damn reason and I am totally alone in this 250 acres campus. The mere possibility of this to happen gave me a chill as little droplets of sweat started to drip on my forehead.
I took out my cellphone and called one of my friends to ask if he was coming. He picked up almost immediately and said that he's already here in the hostel but totally alone and was starting to get scared and that there is no such news of holiday extension or anything like that. This was a relief to both of us.
I reached the hostel, went to my room and kept my bag there and then went to my friend's room. He was not there. I thought he might have been at someone else's room so I started looking for him but couldn't find. I finally came to the lobby of the hostel when my cellphone vibrated in my pocket.
It was him.
Before I could ask him anything he started to ask in a terrified voice where I was. I told him that I am already here in the hostel and that I went to his room and am currently in the lobby. He then shouted at me-
"Is this a sick joke?! please stop messing with me! I am here in the lobby for last four hours and everyone I am calling says that he's in the lobby! Please stop it! It's enough!"
This seemed to me again as a joke as if he was trying to fool me as I was totally alone in there. I disconnected the phone.
I went to the washroom to wash myself. I then grabbed a towel to dry myself and lifted my face up looking in the mirror. There was a deep thrill along my spine as a drop of sweat dripped from the back of my neck.
There was no one in the mirror. No me. Nothing. I kept staring at the reflection of the wall behind me, before I fainted.
I am in the lobby.(Pratik)
The taxi dropped me at the college gate at 5:20 in the morning. I was back to the college after 2 month long vacation, now going to be in the final year of my engineering. The guard was not at the gate, which was a bit unusual, but as it was still early morning, it seemed okay.
I started to walk towards my hostel which was around half kilometres from the gate. The vast campus of the college was covered in lush greenery and the cold breeze gave a very soothing feel.
Usually at this time some students as well as faculty can be seen jogging or walking their pets on the college road and the sweeper sweeping the streets, players practicing in the playground but none of them were there, not even a sound. All I could hear was the sound of leaves rustling, and birds tweeting.
It then occurred to me, what if the vacations got extended due to any damn reason and I am totally alone in this 250 acres campus. The mere possibility of this to happen gave me a chill as little droplets of sweat started to drip on my forehead.
I took out my cellphone and called one of my friends to ask if he was coming. He picked up almost immediately and said that he's already here in the hostel but totally alone and was starting to get scared and that there is no such news of holiday extension or anything like that. This was a relief to both of us.
I reached the hostel, went to my room and kept my bag there and then went to my friend's room. He was not there. I thought he might have been at someone else's room so I started looking for him but couldn't find. I finally came to the lobby of the hostel when my cellphone vibrated in my pocket.
It was him.
Before I could ask him anything he started to ask in a terrified voice where I was. I told him that I am already here in the hostel and that I went to his room and am currently in the lobby. He then shouted at me-
"Is this a sick joke?! please stop messing with me! I am here in the lobby for last four hours and everyone I am calling says that he's in the lobby! Please stop it! It's enough!"
This seemed to me again as a joke as if he was trying to fool me as I was totally alone in there. I disconnected the phone.
I went to the washroom to wash myself. I then grabbed a towel to dry myself and lifted my face up looking in the mirror. There was a deep thrill along my spine as a drop of sweat dripped from the back of my neck.
There was no one in the mirror. No me. Nothing. I kept staring at the reflection of the wall behind me, before I fainted.
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Hafsa bint-e-rashid
03/19/2021long time no talks, congrats for being the story star of the month, ur stories are awesome, keep up the goodwork, badboy
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Chaitali
03/06/2021CONGRATULATIONS PRATIK ON BEING "STORY STAR OF THE MONTH"
keep writing wonderful scary stories
---cheers ;D
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Pratik
03/06/2021THANK YOU CHAITALI FOR CONGRATULATING ME FOR BEING SHORT STORY STAR OF THE MONTH.
I am busy with some other stuff these days so I'll rarely publish. And how can you say that when you yourself haven't published anything from a long time? Now don't say that you had joined StoryStar for just reading stories, etc etc. I liked your stories and I want more...
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Martha Huett
03/01/2021Great story, Pratik! Congratulations on Storystar writer of the month. I hope everyone has a chance to read your stories. They're very entertaining, but scary. Just the way I like it! :)
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Gail Moore
02/28/2021Pratik, you write wonderful stories. A huge congratulations on Storystar of the month. Well done :-)
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Sylvia Maclagan
02/20/2021Great story, Pratik. The end is amazing! Will there be more? Congrats on being STAR of the Day, well deserved. Kind regards, Sylvia
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Sylvia Maclagan
02/21/2021Are you sure, Pratik. Maybe you could follow it up some day. Best wishes!
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Kevin Hughes
02/20/2021Pratik,
That was a wonderful story. Here in the USA there used to be an old Episodic Television Show (in black and white only!) called: The Twilight Zone. This would have been perfect for that show. Wonderful. Just wonderful.
Smiles, Kevin
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MAYRA
02/19/2021Oh god, Pratik.
No one can beat you in writing horror and mystery genre stories.
Loved this one.
Well, you might have directly saved the picture from the internet rather than taking a screenshot. HaHaHaHa!
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MAYRA
02/23/2021Well, yeah! I could clearly see how badly you love arguments! In fact, every one of our nation loves arguments, isn't it? Though we tryna avoid it, we get into some every now and then!
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Pratik
02/22/2021Woah you've got good eyes. I didn't notice that cross.
But that's strange. Why will I take a screenshot and crop it carefully when I can download the image in one click? Moreover, if it was a screenshot, there would have been the 'Google lens' and 'Share' icon in the top right corner of the image. That part isn't cropped. It's the complete image. Check with Google lens.
You didn't exaggerate anything. But I love arguments, LOL. Though I always try to prevent them.
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MAYRA
02/22/2021Dear, there is a "cross" sign on the leftmost upper corner of the photo, If you can see
Oh well, I never exaggerated anything, never mind
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Mystery writer
02/12/2021Nice short story! Loved the ending :) Please read my story and give some feedback, it is called "Prototype"
Keep writing!
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JD
02/19/2021Dear 'Mystery Writer'. Please avoid asking other writers to read your story and give you feedback. ALL writers want others to read their story and give them feedback, but none of them want to feel obligated to give their time freely to others upon request. IF you regularly take the time to read stories and give your comments to the writers, you will earn points as your reward, and you will find that eventually many of them will do the same for you....
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