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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Drama / Human Interest
- Subject: Drama
- Published: 09/25/2021
Lisa was having breakfast in her house when the phone rang.
'Good morning,' said the caller.
'Good morning,' answered Lisa.
'Is this Madam Hanson?' The man enquired.
'Yes. Who is talking?'
'Frank Franklin is talking to you Madam.'
'Nice to meet you sir,' she said.
'I am a lawyer and I have some news to reveal.'
'Which news?'
'Can we have a meeting in my office?'
'I don't understand! News about what and why to go to your office?'
'The news is related to your private life. Very personal.'
'I have nothing personal to discuss with a stranger.'
'Calm down madam. I can understand your suspicions. Anyway I am a well known lawyer in the country and you can ask about me to make sure that things are serious.'
'Please news about what?'
'I said it is private. It won't work on the phone.'
'Ok. Would you like to communicate the address so that I can come with my husband to your office?'
'Don't tell your husband, please!'
Her suspicions grew stronger. She asked,
'Why?'
'Maybe he won't like the news.'
'Mr Franklin are you pulling my leg or looking for some fun?'
'Madam the matter is really serious and might bring about some radical changes in your life. Would you mind taking a pen and jotting down the address?'
'I can't. I don't believe the whole story!'
'Madam. You used to have another husband who disappeared a decade ago.'
'Yes,' she said in a weak voice.
'The news is about him. There is some information to release.'
'Tell me the news now sir. I've started getting worried.'
'Madam take my address and I will be waiting for you in my office at 4 p.m.'
She did as he had told her and when he finished, he ended the conversation by saying:
'Thank you madam for your time. Bye.'
'Bye.'
Lisa stayed still, not knowing what to do or how to recollect her thoughts. In fact, she was leading a happy life with her husband and her son. Her first husband vanished ten years ago and his story faded away with him. Why had the lawyer asked her not to tell her husband about his call? What news could she receive about her first husband?
Her heart started to beat fast. Her eyes became blind, unaware of what was happening around her. She was a faithful wife, honest and trustworthy. She wasn't used to hiding things on her husband.
After thirty minutes, she made the decision to go to see the lawyer. She checked the information he had given her on the net and she found it accurate. Why did he have to make up the whole story? She had nothing confidential in her life. She was an ordinary woman who was enjoying her life with her small family.
Time seemed to have stopped. She wished she had had the possibility to bring forward her appointment, but she couldn't. The fact of waiting was unbearable. She thought of calling her sister to ask for advice, but the call would be fruitless and embarrassing.
Her husband passed away years ago and all of a sudden his death grew eventful. There was news to disclose!
- - -
The forty year old woman arrived at the lawyer's office 30 minutes before the appointment and was forced to wait in the waiting room because the lawyer was busy with a client. Her mind was motionless, unable to think or react and the present moments left the room for the past to conquer all her concentration. What had happened for many years became alive and active. Maybe some past event would be the turning point of her coming days. Her present was eliminated and left a gap between her past and future. She tried in vain to reassure herself and underestimate the extent of the matter, and she couldn't understand why she fell prey to suspicions.
The clock struck four and the secretary ushered her into the lawyer's office. An elderly respectful man was standing behind his desk, the pure product of long years of experience and expertise.
'Good afternoon sir,' said Lisa.
'Good afternoon madam. Have a seat please.'
The lawyer avoided staring at her in order not to distract her. He was aware of how she was feeling. He understood her worry. He busied himself by checking a file waiting for her to be ready to discuss and listen to him.
'So madam I should apologize about the panic and worry I caused this morning, but there is something urgent you have to know.'
'Please sir, go straight to the heart of the matter.'
'You had been married to Mr Johanson by the time he disappeared. He had been assumed to have died in a war while participating in a United Nations peacekeeping mission. His body had been flung because of an explosive. Right?'
'Yes. What you have said is true.'
'He was declared dead and an official ceremony was held to commemorate the soldiers who had lost their lives there.'
'I know all these details sir. Would you mind telling me the news?'
'Sure. Madam …' he said sharply and fixed his eyes on her. 'Your husband is alive and didn't die.'
Lisa gasped in horror and started mumbling. She passed out. The news was too shocking to absorb. Mr Franklin hurried towards her and called his secretary. He thought of calling the ambulance and his secretary told him that there was no need for that. Lisa's state wasn't worrying at all. A few minutes later, Lisa regained her consciousness and found herself lying on the sofa. Mr Franklin and his secretary were watching her carefully. She was pouring with sweat.
After 10 minutes, the lawyer and the lady resumed their conversation.
'How? explain to me how he is still alive? Is it a story of fiction?'
'Not at all madam. It is the truth.'
'How? and where is he?'
'By the way, it is the assignment of the police to tell you this. But your husband, I mean your first husband, opted for a different way to make the communication seamless and alleviate the shock it might bring about.'
Lisa kept listening without saying any word.
'He was thought to be killed by a bomb. The truth is this: He escaped from the attack and lost contact with his compatriots. He kept walking for three days until he found some haven in a tribe in the heart of the African tropical forests. He fell sick and lost memory, a total loss of memory. He lived there for many years and got used to the tribal way of living.'
'Didn't he recover his memory?'
'He did and it happened lately thanks to some zoologists who stayed in the tribe for three days. They were astonished to find him there because it was clear he was from a different race and land. They brought him back on their return. He stayed under medical care for months until his state improved.'
'Unbelievable story. Who can believe all these details?!!'
'He is well now and he wants to see you. Given the privacy of the situation, we agreed to arrange a meeting between you and him without telling anyone. The situation is so sensitive and delicate.'
'I can't say anything now. I need time to think well and absorb the whole story. I have to calculate each move.'
'You have three days to think and come to a decision. I will call you to get your answer.'
- - -
A real earthquake occurred and damaged Lisa's inner peace. The unwelcome sun of her first love shone in the night of her current life. Many things to rethink, many things to question and review.
The Earthquake(Aziz)
Lisa was having breakfast in her house when the phone rang.
'Good morning,' said the caller.
'Good morning,' answered Lisa.
'Is this Madam Hanson?' The man enquired.
'Yes. Who is talking?'
'Frank Franklin is talking to you Madam.'
'Nice to meet you sir,' she said.
'I am a lawyer and I have some news to reveal.'
'Which news?'
'Can we have a meeting in my office?'
'I don't understand! News about what and why to go to your office?'
'The news is related to your private life. Very personal.'
'I have nothing personal to discuss with a stranger.'
'Calm down madam. I can understand your suspicions. Anyway I am a well known lawyer in the country and you can ask about me to make sure that things are serious.'
'Please news about what?'
'I said it is private. It won't work on the phone.'
'Ok. Would you like to communicate the address so that I can come with my husband to your office?'
'Don't tell your husband, please!'
Her suspicions grew stronger. She asked,
'Why?'
'Maybe he won't like the news.'
'Mr Franklin are you pulling my leg or looking for some fun?'
'Madam the matter is really serious and might bring about some radical changes in your life. Would you mind taking a pen and jotting down the address?'
'I can't. I don't believe the whole story!'
'Madam. You used to have another husband who disappeared a decade ago.'
'Yes,' she said in a weak voice.
'The news is about him. There is some information to release.'
'Tell me the news now sir. I've started getting worried.'
'Madam take my address and I will be waiting for you in my office at 4 p.m.'
She did as he had told her and when he finished, he ended the conversation by saying:
'Thank you madam for your time. Bye.'
'Bye.'
Lisa stayed still, not knowing what to do or how to recollect her thoughts. In fact, she was leading a happy life with her husband and her son. Her first husband vanished ten years ago and his story faded away with him. Why had the lawyer asked her not to tell her husband about his call? What news could she receive about her first husband?
Her heart started to beat fast. Her eyes became blind, unaware of what was happening around her. She was a faithful wife, honest and trustworthy. She wasn't used to hiding things on her husband.
After thirty minutes, she made the decision to go to see the lawyer. She checked the information he had given her on the net and she found it accurate. Why did he have to make up the whole story? She had nothing confidential in her life. She was an ordinary woman who was enjoying her life with her small family.
Time seemed to have stopped. She wished she had had the possibility to bring forward her appointment, but she couldn't. The fact of waiting was unbearable. She thought of calling her sister to ask for advice, but the call would be fruitless and embarrassing.
Her husband passed away years ago and all of a sudden his death grew eventful. There was news to disclose!
- - -
The forty year old woman arrived at the lawyer's office 30 minutes before the appointment and was forced to wait in the waiting room because the lawyer was busy with a client. Her mind was motionless, unable to think or react and the present moments left the room for the past to conquer all her concentration. What had happened for many years became alive and active. Maybe some past event would be the turning point of her coming days. Her present was eliminated and left a gap between her past and future. She tried in vain to reassure herself and underestimate the extent of the matter, and she couldn't understand why she fell prey to suspicions.
The clock struck four and the secretary ushered her into the lawyer's office. An elderly respectful man was standing behind his desk, the pure product of long years of experience and expertise.
'Good afternoon sir,' said Lisa.
'Good afternoon madam. Have a seat please.'
The lawyer avoided staring at her in order not to distract her. He was aware of how she was feeling. He understood her worry. He busied himself by checking a file waiting for her to be ready to discuss and listen to him.
'So madam I should apologize about the panic and worry I caused this morning, but there is something urgent you have to know.'
'Please sir, go straight to the heart of the matter.'
'You had been married to Mr Johanson by the time he disappeared. He had been assumed to have died in a war while participating in a United Nations peacekeeping mission. His body had been flung because of an explosive. Right?'
'Yes. What you have said is true.'
'He was declared dead and an official ceremony was held to commemorate the soldiers who had lost their lives there.'
'I know all these details sir. Would you mind telling me the news?'
'Sure. Madam …' he said sharply and fixed his eyes on her. 'Your husband is alive and didn't die.'
Lisa gasped in horror and started mumbling. She passed out. The news was too shocking to absorb. Mr Franklin hurried towards her and called his secretary. He thought of calling the ambulance and his secretary told him that there was no need for that. Lisa's state wasn't worrying at all. A few minutes later, Lisa regained her consciousness and found herself lying on the sofa. Mr Franklin and his secretary were watching her carefully. She was pouring with sweat.
After 10 minutes, the lawyer and the lady resumed their conversation.
'How? explain to me how he is still alive? Is it a story of fiction?'
'Not at all madam. It is the truth.'
'How? and where is he?'
'By the way, it is the assignment of the police to tell you this. But your husband, I mean your first husband, opted for a different way to make the communication seamless and alleviate the shock it might bring about.'
Lisa kept listening without saying any word.
'He was thought to be killed by a bomb. The truth is this: He escaped from the attack and lost contact with his compatriots. He kept walking for three days until he found some haven in a tribe in the heart of the African tropical forests. He fell sick and lost memory, a total loss of memory. He lived there for many years and got used to the tribal way of living.'
'Didn't he recover his memory?'
'He did and it happened lately thanks to some zoologists who stayed in the tribe for three days. They were astonished to find him there because it was clear he was from a different race and land. They brought him back on their return. He stayed under medical care for months until his state improved.'
'Unbelievable story. Who can believe all these details?!!'
'He is well now and he wants to see you. Given the privacy of the situation, we agreed to arrange a meeting between you and him without telling anyone. The situation is so sensitive and delicate.'
'I can't say anything now. I need time to think well and absorb the whole story. I have to calculate each move.'
'You have three days to think and come to a decision. I will call you to get your answer.'
- - -
A real earthquake occurred and damaged Lisa's inner peace. The unwelcome sun of her first love shone in the night of her current life. Many things to rethink, many things to question and review.
Lillian Kazmierczak
10/01/2021Aziz, congratulations on Star Story of the day! It was a great story. I have no idea what I would do if I got that kind of news! I keep going back to it in my thoughts...only a good writing can do that. Well,done Aziz!
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Aziz
10/02/2021I did enjoy reading your feedback Lillian and I am happy to get your mind thinking of the events and what would happen. Grateful for your time.
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Christal Donegan
10/01/2021Thi story was well-written. Thank you for the upload and I certainly look forward to reading more of your work. There is great talent here! The world will appreciate you.
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Aziz
10/02/2021What motivating words! They reached my soul and left me grateful for your generosity and appreciation.
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Shirley Smothers
10/01/2021A great story. Thank you for sharing. I love that you left the ending for us to come up with our on conclusions. Kept me interested.
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Aziz
10/02/2021Thank you Shirley for your time and lovely words. Looking forward to reading your works.
Cordially
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Ed DeRousse
10/01/2021This was a really good read. I read through the story expecting a certain ending. I did not get the ending I expected. I don't mind, though. Life can and does take many turns. Your story made sense. I can visualize my own ending to this story. But if you write your ending, I wonder if mine will be the same as yours?
Great job.
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Aziz
10/01/2021First, I am grateful for your time and appreciation. Second, I enjoy reading your feedback and getting an idea about your reaction. I did leave the reader free to shape his ending before showing mine. Your contribution is fruitful sir.
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Rachel Roy
10/01/2021This is really quite good. If you were to make any changes, I wouold suggest ending it right after the "I will call you to get your answer." The last sentences are not needed to 'wrap up' the story. You leave us on the cliff hanger and that is fine.
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Aziz
10/01/2021Thank you for your time and feedback. I understand your suggestion well and it made me think of many ideas. Grateful for your comment
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Radrook
09/27/2021Interesting story. Thanks for sharing. You certainly did succeed in conveying the severe emotional shock that the news had on Lisa. As a reader I did identify, and imagined the tension that such an experience would entail. Old emotions that had been felt resurging along with special memories, would definitely wreak havoc on a person who is suddenly informed that a spouse considered dead has been alive all the time.
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Aziz
09/27/2021I do enjoy reading your feedback. You succeeded to dive deep in some of my thoughts and grasp tge psychology of Lisa. I am grateful for your time Radrook.
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Gail Moore
09/25/2021Great piece, interesting and intriguing.
Will you have a part two where she meets her first husband?
Awesome Aziz :-)
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Rachel Roy
10/01/2021This is a really great idea, I would eagerly read that!
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Aziz
09/26/2021Thank you Gail. I always appreciate your lovely feedback.
I will try to write it soon.
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JD
09/25/2021I was really enjoying your story until the end of it left me hanging on the edge of cliff without knowing the ending or finding any sort of resolution to the conflict and mystery you created. As a reader, I always feel frustrated when stories do not have a satisfying ending. But other than the frustration I am now feeling, I thought it was a great read. Thanks Aziz.
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Aziz
10/01/2021Thank you JD for this immense positive energy. Always appreciating your tremendous effort.
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JD
09/25/2021Well you definitely succeeded in making me feel like the character in your story, so since that was intentional on your part, then bravo, Aziz! Well done! :-)
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