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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Action & Adventure
- Subject: Courage / Heroism
- Published: 10/21/2021
The Hunter
Born 1976, M, from Whitechapel, Australia
I crouch at the edge of a crevasse and plot my path downward; conscious of things that might compromise stealth. Bark, twigs, dead leaves—none of it must betray me. The forest is my accomplice: its breezes mask my scent; its mist cloaks my body.
I am fear. I am death. I am The Hunter.
As I descend, I am flushed with anticipation. I shudder. Does he hear? I am still and I wait. Will he flee or will he stay? This is what I love about the chase—not just the rush, but the risk. The reward makes me salivate. I can already taste the sweetness of his flesh. I can hear the adulation of my kin.
He cranes his neck. I stop breathing. Our eyes meet. Will he run? The moment stretches into eternity. In that instant, we know each other. Man and beast. Hunter and quarry. The Eater and The Eaten. He is pathetic and broken and I almost feel impelled to let him go.
When he gathers the courage to bolt, my instincts kick in. I charge. He weaves. I lose traction on the pebbles of the dried river bed. He’s nearly beyond my grasp! But, then, it happens: he slows on the bank’s incline. The advantage comes my way.
I have him.
My ancestors bay at the waning moon and the sound echoes through the caverns of my mind. As I rip and tear at his throat, I marvel at the creature’s simplicity. Its teeth are blunt. It has little fur. It can barely see in the dark. It walks on its hind legs. So laborious and inefficient: the lesser son of an indifferent Earth; like the world intentionally failed to prepare it.
He stops wriggling. His life force drains and my jaws are wet with it.
My howls are quickly answered. The pack will come soon; loping in from the shadows, armed with pointed tooth and claw. They will growl, and feast and they will approve—take me back into the fold—I know it. I will be lone-wolf no more.
I am fear. I am death. I am The Hunter.
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Martha Huett
11/08/2021This story is excellent Jason. I find it not only mysterious, exciting and scary, but philosophical too..."the lesser son of an indifferent world" and then "like the world intentionally failed to prepare it". It's just so much fun to contemplate your words! Thanks for this:)
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Jason James Parker
11/10/2021Thank you so much, Martha. I really appreciate your thoughtful and supremely kind comments. : )
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Herm Sherwood-Sitts
10/29/2021Loved this Jason. Your discriptive writing puts the reader there. The twist takes the cake! Awesome read!
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Gerald R Gioglio
10/26/2021Cool, man..."lions and tigers and bears, Oh my." Really good, thanks. Jerry
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Jason James Parker
10/27/2021Thank you, Jerry. You're very kind. (For some reason I added my reply to you as a comment above. Perhaps I've spent too much time on the Yellow Brick Road. Lol). Thanks again. : )
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Kanishka Roy
10/26/2021Nobody does first person narration better than you do! You are indeed the hunter! I'm in awe with your phrasing.
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Jason James Parker
10/27/2021Thank you so much, Kanishka. What an awesome compliment. Congrats on Writer of the Month too! : )
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Kevin Hughes
10/26/2021Congrats on Story Star of the day, Jason.
I swear between this one and the lipstick challenge, my reading time has gone way up! LOL. Smiles, Kevin
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Jason James Parker
10/27/2021Thank you very much, Kevin. I know what you mean. Your excellent challenges have generated so much brilliant content by all my favorite Storystars! : )
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Lillian Kazmierczak
10/22/2021I will never hunt after this story!! You squigged me out with this one Jason! Good writing will do that. Very nice story!
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Kevin Hughes
10/22/2021Aloha Jason,
Loved this. Lone wolf indeed. Buy your way back into the pack...with a human body. Lovely. LOL
My story for the challenge is up now. I titled it: "Its coming for you."
Smiles, Kevin
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Gail Moore
10/21/2021Oh God, I got shivers down my spine. I don't think I can begin to compete but ill give it a try.
Awesome my friend :-)
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Jason James Parker
10/23/2021Thank you so much, Gail. I'm really happy that you had that reaction. : )
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JD
10/21/2021Wolves will be wolves! Good one, Jason! Well done being the first to take up the new challenge! :-)
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Jason James Parker
10/23/2021So true, Jd. Just had a read of Exile, and it's brilliant. Thank you for the recommendation. : )
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JD
10/21/2021Hahaha! And yet... aren't the monsters inside of us all? Where there are human beings... predator or prey... there be monsters lurking! : )
Jason, have you ever read the story, Exile, from the early days of Storystar? If not, based on this story, I think you'd really enjoy it.
Here is the link if you are interested: https://www.storystar.com/story/1554/joshua-t-calkins-treworgy/fiction/fairy-tales-fantasy
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