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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Love stories / Romance
- Subject: Character Based
- Published: 11/17/2021
"I Don't Love You Anymore"
Born 1955, M, from Norwich NY, United States“I Don’t Love You Anymore”
By Herm Sherwood-Sitts
“I don’t Love you anymore,” she said while loading the last of her possessions into the car. He never said a word and watched as she disappeared into the setting sun.
He went on doing what he does. He was married to his job, the way a lot of men are. He didn’t pay attention to what really mattered and kept his nose to the grindstone. For sixty years he followed that white line, shifting gears, smelling the diesel and thinking of her.
She spent her sixty years looking for a man that looked at her the way he did. She never found those quiet, beautiful eyes or the gentle, calloused hands that stroked her soft body. To this day she regrets her decision to leave. Set in her stubborn ways, she never went back.
Then one night, in a snowy blizzard, the white line disappeared. There in the twisted metal and shattered glass the trucker’s life expired. He left his life savings to her. He had no one else.
As she laid the rose on his cold coffin, tears ran down her cheeks. She pictured those kind beautiful eyes and remembered the lie she told him sixty years ago when she said, “I don’t love you anymore".
"I Don't Love You Anymore"(Herm Sherwood-Sitts)
“I Don’t Love You Anymore”
By Herm Sherwood-Sitts
“I don’t Love you anymore,” she said while loading the last of her possessions into the car. He never said a word and watched as she disappeared into the setting sun.
He went on doing what he does. He was married to his job, the way a lot of men are. He didn’t pay attention to what really mattered and kept his nose to the grindstone. For sixty years he followed that white line, shifting gears, smelling the diesel and thinking of her.
She spent her sixty years looking for a man that looked at her the way he did. She never found those quiet, beautiful eyes or the gentle, calloused hands that stroked her soft body. To this day she regrets her decision to leave. Set in her stubborn ways, she never went back.
Then one night, in a snowy blizzard, the white line disappeared. There in the twisted metal and shattered glass the trucker’s life expired. He left his life savings to her. He had no one else.
As she laid the rose on his cold coffin, tears ran down her cheeks. She pictured those kind beautiful eyes and remembered the lie she told him sixty years ago when she said, “I don’t love you anymore".
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Martha Huett
11/18/2021What a superb flash fiction! As Jd said, you've packed a whole lot into your short story which, at least for me, is extremely difficult to do. Excellent. Thanks Herm :)
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JD
11/17/2021There was a lot of lifetime and heartache written between the lines of this short story. I think many relationships end for no good reason, when if either of the two would have just tried a little harder and communicated a little better, things could have been improved and the relationship could have been a lifelong benefit to both. It's a sad reality. Your story captured one such case scenario beautifully. Thanks Herm.
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Herm Sherwood-Sitts
11/17/2021Thank you for reading the story JD. Sometimes I write not to be liked, but to make people think. Like Broken People, this is one of them times.
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Kevin Hughes
11/17/2021Aloha Herm,
Are you sure this isn't a True Story? I know at least four men, and six women who could be the one who left...and it was the wrong thing to do. Two were over Religion, Four were over "I need to see what's over the next hill" and the others were assorted misunderstandings where Forgivenesss was waiting, but never asked for. It sure touched my heart.
Smiles, Kevin
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