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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Science Fiction
- Subject: Survival / Healing / Renewal
- Published: 12/03/2021
The Tale of Vault 1001
Born 2008, M, from Las Veges/Nevada, United States“All I remember is running, The sound of air raid sirens blasting as I run to the vault” Jack said as a tear ran down his cheek. “My parents never made it,” Jack's voice softens as he specks. 14 years earlier, “Mom, where are my clean clothes?” Jack yelled across the house. Mom responded “Check in the…”. Mom was interrupted by the emergency broadcast system. “We have detected nuclear missiles launched towards these areas, Las Vegas, Denver, New Orleans, and South Carolina. Please make it to your local vault if you are permitted to enter,” The voice from the tv concluded. “Did that say New Orleans?” Mom mumbled. The air raid sirens started sounding. Jack ran out the door as fast as he could, mom was right behind him. “Jack!” She yelled, but he was already at the vault door. By the time she got there the door closed and the bomb went off.
The boom of the doors closing startled Jack . “Mom!” Jack yelled, there was no response. Jack looked around only to see kids, no adults, except people in lab coats. “Excuse me mister, where are our parents,” one kid asked. The man in the lab coat responded “ Theater gone now, probably nothing but dust but we got you so that’s a plus, you’re all that matters”. A kid walks up to Jack, he tells him “ I know you, I think you live in my neighborhood.”, Jack responded syernly “I have never met you in my li..” he was interrupted by a voice on the intercom “Welcome to vault 1001 you have been chosen because of your high intelligence, agility, and extremely maintained physical condition, because of the attributes you will perform a series of challenging tests to prove you can survive out in the wasteland”. “Wasteland” Jack thought “What is that?”. “Hey!” A man's voice sead, “I was talking to you.” Jack thought the process was interrupted. “What do you want?” Jack sneered angrily. The man smacked Jack across the face, “Don’t You ever Talk back with me!” The man yelled in anger, “Do you understand boy?” “Yes mister!” Jack screamed. “Good Because there is a lot more where that came from.” the man said with anger
A voice yelled across the room “everyone quite! Line up and stay lined up!” Jack realized that it was the man that smacked him. “Now you will proceed forward than left, you will put on your vault suits then go down the hall to the cafeteria and sit!” Jack and all the other children lined up in a line and followed the man's instructions. Now in the cafeteria Jack is released, he is trapped in here with none one but kids, scientists, and security guards. The voice on the intercom started to talk “if you fail the test you will be executed by our guards, if you risest orders you will be punished. This will be your only warning.” the rado screeks off. Jack's stomach sinks “Execute us.” He thought. “Move” a kid said, as the guards ran after him. Next he hears a blood curdling scream and a loud pop, the first death in vault 1001. A voice over the income said “Let that be a lesson to all of you, now head to the cafeteria.”. Guards packed on both sides of the children as they squeeze down the tight hallway. Small bits of gossip erupted inside the cafeteria as Jack started to eat his salad. “Hey I am Cris”, Jack responded “And I am jack, nice to meet you”. Jack had finished his salad.” All of you come with me,” a man with a deep voice said, “You will be put through your first test, all of you will be isolated for 16 days with no food but there will be little water, you must learn how to rashan it or you will die,”.
13 years later. “Ready, Set, Fire!” The crackle of the guns and the thud of the bodys falling to the ground. Jack and all of the other kids are adults now but they are still trapped. They have been in this vault for 13 years. “You all the remaining you have been the strongest and most indigent. Conggulaton to the 30 of you. You are strong and the most obedient vault dwellers, now you may exit the vault.” The tall scientist said with a smirk on his face. Jack cracked a smile. All of the people left were just men, no women, all of them were executed a long time ago. The thought of the outside made jack smile until he realized what the test and challenges were for. “Allright, you all are going to line up and walk out. The creek of the door opening gave Jack flashbacks to 13 years before as the bombs started to drop. As Jack looked outside the filling of disgust and hatred towards the people that did this to them. He thought “Them chinese doing this to us, who would do such a thin….” Then he remembered the bombs of Hiroshima and Nagasaki that we dropped in the 40’s. His mind started to wander as he thought “Why would they do this 132 years after we destroyed their cities?” But he had no time to ponder as he was pushed out into the wasteland.
Present day. “I need you to help me,” one of the minute men said. “Our organisation depends on teamwork. We need your help,” the minute men member repeated. “I am sorry I can't,” a random wastelander said with sympathy. Jack overheard the minute men pleads for help.”What do you need help with,” Jack said “We are going to attack an outpost and need supplies” The man said as he played with his fingers. “What kind of supplies?” Jack asked with confusion on his face. “We need ammunition,” the man said. “I am sorry I don't have any.” Jack said sunserly. The man fell to his knees “Please sir, we……” “I SAID NO!” Jack screamed so loud he felt as if the whole world could hear him. The man startled and frinton, he flashed his knife “ Get away from me and my minutemen do you here.”. Jack stepped back and drew his sword. “Drop the knife and we all can walk home safe” Jack said as he had the upper hand. The man luned at Jack full force. Jack moves to the side and the man stabs a buff guy with a gun who proceeds to shoot the man in the face. Jack closes his eyes.
“this is the world now? I can’t believe this.” Jack said in his mind. Boom! The sound of an exposition shocked Jack and he got a flash back to the bomb exploding. He started heading back to his vault. When he sees a skeleton on the floor and neer it was a restaurant name tag which is what his mom was wearing. Jack started sobbing and was hugging the selling ton which was complete with his mom's ring that Jack gave her for her birthday that year, the year the bombs dropped. Jack jumped up and remembered why he was going to the vault. “I need that pipboy,” he said in his mind. BOOM! Again the sound startled Jack as hears turns around he sees it.
The Tale of Vault 1001(Kole)
“All I remember is running, The sound of air raid sirens blasting as I run to the vault” Jack said as a tear ran down his cheek. “My parents never made it,” Jack's voice softens as he specks. 14 years earlier, “Mom, where are my clean clothes?” Jack yelled across the house. Mom responded “Check in the…”. Mom was interrupted by the emergency broadcast system. “We have detected nuclear missiles launched towards these areas, Las Vegas, Denver, New Orleans, and South Carolina. Please make it to your local vault if you are permitted to enter,” The voice from the tv concluded. “Did that say New Orleans?” Mom mumbled. The air raid sirens started sounding. Jack ran out the door as fast as he could, mom was right behind him. “Jack!” She yelled, but he was already at the vault door. By the time she got there the door closed and the bomb went off.
The boom of the doors closing startled Jack . “Mom!” Jack yelled, there was no response. Jack looked around only to see kids, no adults, except people in lab coats. “Excuse me mister, where are our parents,” one kid asked. The man in the lab coat responded “ Theater gone now, probably nothing but dust but we got you so that’s a plus, you’re all that matters”. A kid walks up to Jack, he tells him “ I know you, I think you live in my neighborhood.”, Jack responded syernly “I have never met you in my li..” he was interrupted by a voice on the intercom “Welcome to vault 1001 you have been chosen because of your high intelligence, agility, and extremely maintained physical condition, because of the attributes you will perform a series of challenging tests to prove you can survive out in the wasteland”. “Wasteland” Jack thought “What is that?”. “Hey!” A man's voice sead, “I was talking to you.” Jack thought the process was interrupted. “What do you want?” Jack sneered angrily. The man smacked Jack across the face, “Don’t You ever Talk back with me!” The man yelled in anger, “Do you understand boy?” “Yes mister!” Jack screamed. “Good Because there is a lot more where that came from.” the man said with anger
A voice yelled across the room “everyone quite! Line up and stay lined up!” Jack realized that it was the man that smacked him. “Now you will proceed forward than left, you will put on your vault suits then go down the hall to the cafeteria and sit!” Jack and all the other children lined up in a line and followed the man's instructions. Now in the cafeteria Jack is released, he is trapped in here with none one but kids, scientists, and security guards. The voice on the intercom started to talk “if you fail the test you will be executed by our guards, if you risest orders you will be punished. This will be your only warning.” the rado screeks off. Jack's stomach sinks “Execute us.” He thought. “Move” a kid said, as the guards ran after him. Next he hears a blood curdling scream and a loud pop, the first death in vault 1001. A voice over the income said “Let that be a lesson to all of you, now head to the cafeteria.”. Guards packed on both sides of the children as they squeeze down the tight hallway. Small bits of gossip erupted inside the cafeteria as Jack started to eat his salad. “Hey I am Cris”, Jack responded “And I am jack, nice to meet you”. Jack had finished his salad.” All of you come with me,” a man with a deep voice said, “You will be put through your first test, all of you will be isolated for 16 days with no food but there will be little water, you must learn how to rashan it or you will die,”.
13 years later. “Ready, Set, Fire!” The crackle of the guns and the thud of the bodys falling to the ground. Jack and all of the other kids are adults now but they are still trapped. They have been in this vault for 13 years. “You all the remaining you have been the strongest and most indigent. Conggulaton to the 30 of you. You are strong and the most obedient vault dwellers, now you may exit the vault.” The tall scientist said with a smirk on his face. Jack cracked a smile. All of the people left were just men, no women, all of them were executed a long time ago. The thought of the outside made jack smile until he realized what the test and challenges were for. “Allright, you all are going to line up and walk out. The creek of the door opening gave Jack flashbacks to 13 years before as the bombs started to drop. As Jack looked outside the filling of disgust and hatred towards the people that did this to them. He thought “Them chinese doing this to us, who would do such a thin….” Then he remembered the bombs of Hiroshima and Nagasaki that we dropped in the 40’s. His mind started to wander as he thought “Why would they do this 132 years after we destroyed their cities?” But he had no time to ponder as he was pushed out into the wasteland.
Present day. “I need you to help me,” one of the minute men said. “Our organisation depends on teamwork. We need your help,” the minute men member repeated. “I am sorry I can't,” a random wastelander said with sympathy. Jack overheard the minute men pleads for help.”What do you need help with,” Jack said “We are going to attack an outpost and need supplies” The man said as he played with his fingers. “What kind of supplies?” Jack asked with confusion on his face. “We need ammunition,” the man said. “I am sorry I don't have any.” Jack said sunserly. The man fell to his knees “Please sir, we……” “I SAID NO!” Jack screamed so loud he felt as if the whole world could hear him. The man startled and frinton, he flashed his knife “ Get away from me and my minutemen do you here.”. Jack stepped back and drew his sword. “Drop the knife and we all can walk home safe” Jack said as he had the upper hand. The man luned at Jack full force. Jack moves to the side and the man stabs a buff guy with a gun who proceeds to shoot the man in the face. Jack closes his eyes.
“this is the world now? I can’t believe this.” Jack said in his mind. Boom! The sound of an exposition shocked Jack and he got a flash back to the bomb exploding. He started heading back to his vault. When he sees a skeleton on the floor and neer it was a restaurant name tag which is what his mom was wearing. Jack started sobbing and was hugging the selling ton which was complete with his mom's ring that Jack gave her for her birthday that year, the year the bombs dropped. Jack jumped up and remembered why he was going to the vault. “I need that pipboy,” he said in his mind. BOOM! Again the sound startled Jack as hears turns around he sees it.
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Kole
12/03/2021If you enjoy tis story plese give me feedback, also rate to give me suport. :)
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Jessica
12/04/2021This is a great story! I am a mom to a 12 year old boy and it is very difficult to find stories he likes. Your story has so much adventure and stuff he is interested in. I hope you will write more and let us know more about what happens in the Wasteland. Great job! And don’t worry about any errors, with more practice you will get better and better! Thank you for a great story!
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JD
12/03/2021Kole, if you want readers to give you their 'support' and positive feedback, you need to show them the respect of putting forth your best effort of story writing. That means carefully proofreading and correcting your story before you publish it to be publicly judged and rated. My guess is that you have a lot of potential as a writer, but it is difficult for readers to appreciate that because your English writing skills are lacking. Your story is filled with spelling and grammar errors, and it is unfinished, so you have not given readers much reason to 'support' you.
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