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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Family & Friends
- Subject: Community / Home
- Published: 09/27/2022
"Look i know you and me have never been on the like terms and but let me just tell you something ,Alexandra" said Alexis, Alexandra stayed with her back facing her mother still refusing to talk to her, Alexis sighed "ever since i can remember my parents have never shown me any kind of love all they were always too busy to spend time with me and your Uncle Alexander, they cared about money more than they cared about us, we were both obsessed to get their love that we did our very best everyday and even then they didn't care about us and treated us as trash, we, being our ever doubtful and low self esteemed selves though that the problem was with us and not them and eventually when we were teenagers we started competing with each other to win our parent's love, i would cramp day and night to get better marks than Alex but Alexander would do worse than that during the exams he would surround himself with books and lock himself in his room and not sleep or eat at all until the day of the exams, and i would always be shocked seeing my twin brother looking extremely thin and pale, though my parents started to notice my brother's hard work they still treated us as trash but a bit better but that's all, eventually me and Alex graduated high school one year earlier, but i wished we didn't cause ever since then our parents started treating us differently and started "loving" us, of course at first we didn't believe them but soon Alex believed them and started falling for their trap and eventually became their love's diehard fan literally! , me however did not believe them, one day, i had trouble sleeping and i was thirsty when i was passing my parent's bedroom when i heard some them talking and peeped in through the door and i found out that my parents were showering us with love, and gifts so that they we would eventually be brainwashed by them and then they could use us as business deals i was shocked and when i bursted into their room and confronted about and warned that i would tell Alex about them they just laughed like evil villains and said that i can tell him what ever i want but he wont believe me i was shocked and ran from there and i could here them luaghing i ran straight to Alexander' s bed room and told him everything but just like they said, just like i feared he didn't.... he didn't believe me" Alexis continued, Alexandra turned around to find her mother breaking down and crying and turned to comfort her "I was so shocked and my parents were laughing behind me and i just was so... i just felt like i had been struck by a lighting of grief i just slowly walked down to my room and wept there for a few ours by then every one had gone back to sleep i decided to leave my home because i knew this was the last straw all this time they did not love us no they completely changed my once loving twin brother to their number one minion i left that night and decided to just get lost, just any where but home was okay for me and that's when i met your father he was just a normal 21 year old boy who turned to be running away from home just like me we instantly bonded and we started to live together in a orphanage and work together in a soup kitchen eventually we fell in love" Alexis continued "but isn't grandpa and grandma dead why haven't your brother, i mean my uncle give you some money or even visit you?" asked Alexandra "since we both left our families we didn't get any money from either sides and were left poor so that's why we didn't have any money" replied Alexis "So is this why you and papa never talked about your family" asked Alexandra Alexis sighed and nodded "i am sorry i didn't tell you, i just thought it wasn't the right time yet" apologized Alexis "it's okay mama, i get it you have gone through a lot including papa's death and i am sorry for hurting you". Thus Alexis and her daughter, Alexandra made up with each other and there were no more secrets to keep from each other
Alexis And Her Daughter,Alexandra(Azira Wolf Heart) "Look i know you and me have never been on the like terms and but let me just tell you something ,Alexandra" said Alexis, Alexandra stayed with her back facing her mother still refusing to talk to her, Alexis sighed "ever since i can remember my parents have never shown me any kind of love all they were always too busy to spend time with me and your Uncle Alexander, they cared about money more than they cared about us, we were both obsessed to get their love that we did our very best everyday and even then they didn't care about us and treated us as trash, we, being our ever doubtful and low self esteemed selves though that the problem was with us and not them and eventually when we were teenagers we started competing with each other to win our parent's love, i would cramp day and night to get better marks than Alex but Alexander would do worse than that during the exams he would surround himself with books and lock himself in his room and not sleep or eat at all until the day of the exams, and i would always be shocked seeing my twin brother looking extremely thin and pale, though my parents started to notice my brother's hard work they still treated us as trash but a bit better but that's all, eventually me and Alex graduated high school one year earlier, but i wished we didn't cause ever since then our parents started treating us differently and started "loving" us, of course at first we didn't believe them but soon Alex believed them and started falling for their trap and eventually became their love's diehard fan literally! , me however did not believe them, one day, i had trouble sleeping and i was thirsty when i was passing my parent's bedroom when i heard some them talking and peeped in through the door and i found out that my parents were showering us with love, and gifts so that they we would eventually be brainwashed by them and then they could use us as business deals i was shocked and when i bursted into their room and confronted about and warned that i would tell Alex about them they just laughed like evil villains and said that i can tell him what ever i want but he wont believe me i was shocked and ran from there and i could here them luaghing i ran straight to Alexander' s bed room and told him everything but just like they said, just like i feared he didn't.... he didn't believe me" Alexis continued, Alexandra turned around to find her mother breaking down and crying and turned to comfort her "I was so shocked and my parents were laughing behind me and i just was so... i just felt like i had been struck by a lighting of grief i just slowly walked down to my room and wept there for a few ours by then every one had gone back to sleep i decided to leave my home because i knew this was the last straw all this time they did not love us no they completely changed my once loving twin brother to their number one minion i left that night and decided to just get lost, just any where but home was okay for me and that's when i met your father he was just a normal 21 year old boy who turned to be running away from home just like me we instantly bonded and we started to live together in a orphanage and work together in a soup kitchen eventually we fell in love" Alexis continued "but isn't grandpa and grandma dead why haven't your brother, i mean my uncle give you some money or even visit you?" asked Alexandra "since we both left our families we didn't get any money from either sides and were left poor so that's why we didn't have any money" replied Alexis "So is this why you and papa never talked about your family" asked Alexandra Alexis sighed and nodded "i am sorry i didn't tell you, i just thought it wasn't the right time yet" apologized Alexis "it's okay mama, i get it you have gone through a lot including papa's death and i am sorry for hurting you". Thus Alexis and her daughter, Alexandra made up with each other and there were no more secrets to keep from each other
Help Us Understand What's Happening
Help Us Understand What's Happening
Help Us Understand What's Happening
Help Us Understand What's Happening
Kevin Hughes
09/27/2022Azira,
I am always amazed at folks who are bilingual and can write in either language. You have talent, that is obvious from your story. There are a few things you can do to make it easier on the reader to read. First, break it into paragraphs, for the reader, reading without paragrpahs is like listening to someone talking without taking a breath, or letting you interject.
The other tip is to work on how to punctuate dialog. There are many good books on Style and Structure for you to scan for those tips. Ask your English Teacher at School for some tips...or pick up a copy of a book called: "The Elements of Style," by Strunk and White. It is easy to read and chock full of good advice.
This story had a lot of insight and emotion within...and the reader needs some time to think about the story...so those paragraph breaks would come in very handy.
Smiles, Kevin
Help Us Understand What's Happening
Azira Wolf Heart
09/27/2022Thank you so much for your advice Kevin, i will be sure to do it next time. and i am happy that you liked the story
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