My Cup Runneth Empty

My Cup Runneth Empty(Ashley) MY CUP RUNNETH EMPTY!
My cup is empty and when I say that I am not looking for no sympathy, I am just saying my cup is empty. I have nothing left to give but my presence but if I am being honest my presence is not even present. My energy is drained, a lot of shit running through my brain trying to stay sane, trying to maintain an act. Any day now I feel like I am going to snap, crackle and then pop, like mannn with all this thinking I am about to blow my top.my cup runneth empty, I promise you I am not looking for no sympathy, I am just saying I have nothing left to give, I gave it all to the wrong person now I am sitting here hollow and heart hurting, tears jerking with absolutely nothing else to give but my presence but even then I am still not present. My cup runneth empty and I am not asking for no sympathy I am just saying maybe, just maybe, you can pour into me.

Marla

12/24/2022

The repeated line is very effective in this, and the way you ended this is perfect. You're able to give the reader a real sense of your feelings. Keep writing!

The repeated line is very effective in this, and the way you ended this is perfect. You're able to give the reader a real sense of your feelings. Keep writing!

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Radrook

12/21/2022

I liked reading your poem. I like the way it is alluding of the biblical expression "My cup runneth over." in Psalms 23:5
I like the threefold repetition of My cup Runneth empy.
I also like the internal rhymes of empty, sympathy, brain, and drain, sane, maintain, pop and top.
Also the assonance of hollow, heart, hearting make a great contribution to the poems musicality an...

I liked reading your poem. I like the way it is alluding of the biblical expression "My cup runneth over." in Psalms 23:5
I like the threefold repetition of My cup Runneth empy.
I also like the internal rhymes of empty, sympathy, brain, and drain, sane, maintain, pop and top.
Also the assonance of hollow, heart, hearting make a great contribution to the poems musicality and flow.

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