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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Life Changing Decisions/Events
- Published: 05/25/2023
The Frigid Water
F, from Mianwali, PakistanAutumn was depressed.
She decided to die.
The night was nightmarishly chilly. She went to the river to commit suicide. There, she noticed a girl who was soaked to the bones. She struggled to breathe, and her body was grey. She was staring at the water of the river.
Autumn interrogated, "Are you okay?"
"The frostiness of water is deadly. My action has given me remorse and sorrow" the young girl uttered.
"What did you do?" Autumn asked.
"I committed suicide by drowning. As the frigid water engulfed me, I instantly recalled all the good times, my family, my friends and the people who would cry their eyes out after I died. I regret doing it," the young girl said, looking at Autumn.
Autumn was shocked to see that the girl was her future self who repented ending her life.
Autumn shrieked and woke up from the dream. She had learned a good lesson.
Thenceforth, she focused on positive aspects of life and led a happy and meaningful life.
The Frigid Water(Aleena Nawaz)
Autumn was depressed.
She decided to die.
The night was nightmarishly chilly. She went to the river to commit suicide. There, she noticed a girl who was soaked to the bones. She struggled to breathe, and her body was grey. She was staring at the water of the river.
Autumn interrogated, "Are you okay?"
"The frostiness of water is deadly. My action has given me remorse and sorrow" the young girl uttered.
"What did you do?" Autumn asked.
"I committed suicide by drowning. As the frigid water engulfed me, I instantly recalled all the good times, my family, my friends and the people who would cry their eyes out after I died. I regret doing it," the young girl said, looking at Autumn.
Autumn was shocked to see that the girl was her future self who repented ending her life.
Autumn shrieked and woke up from the dream. She had learned a good lesson.
Thenceforth, she focused on positive aspects of life and led a happy and meaningful life.
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Zahid Ahmad
10/02/2023That's an absolutely captivating story. The choice of words is wonderful.
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Mike
09/30/2023Wow, great message Aleena, wake up calls are soimportant that it could save someones lifes.We dont value something till we lose it, and autumn got to knew how would it be without it and realised the value of her life. Nice.
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Aleena Nawaz
09/30/2023Thanks a million for your precious comment. You are absolutely right. I truly appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts.
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Dr. Albert Hunter
06/13/2023Excellent story, Aleena. It is brilliantly written.
Happy short story writer of the month, Aleena. A well-deserved recognition.
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Freddie Thomas
05/28/2023It is an absolutely amazing story. I loved it. It is beautifully written. Thanks for sharing it, Aleena.
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Soniya sameer
05/25/2023A fantastic story. It was an interesting story from the start till the end. Thanks for creating it, Aleena.
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Charles Walter
05/25/2023Your words paint vivid images that are sure to stay with readers for a long time. Thanks for creating this thought-provoking tale.
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Dr. Albert Hunter
05/25/2023Aleena, you are a talented author. Your skill and attention to detail are truly remarkable. Your stories captivate readers and keep them engaged. It is a pleasure to read your work. Keep up the great work!
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Aleena Nawaz
05/25/2023Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts. I am truly grateful for your encouragement. Thanks again for your appreciation.
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Freddie Thomas
05/25/2023Thank you so much for sharing this life-changing story. It was a good read.
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