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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Drama / Human Interest
- Subject: General Interest
- Published: 06/02/2023
A Walk in the Park
Born 1929, M, from Roseville/CA, United States2023WalkinPark (Approx. 450 wds.)
A Walk in the Park
Paul Lerner sits in front of his computer. He’s trying to write his column “Observations” for the senior paper that goes to his retirement community every month. He looks at what he’s written and decides that it’s meaningless. He gets up and goes out on his porch. It’s still early and not too warm with a slight breeze. He remembers that he wants to take his car for its weekly drive. At his age he’s all but given up driving but still does so within the retirement community. He doesn’t want to feel that he’s completely confined to his house.
He drives the short distance to the park where he and his wife used to walk. He takes his walker out of the trunk. He no longer trusts himself to be able to walk the circuit of the park’s path with his cane as they used to do. As he enters the park a woman comes alongside him and asks if he’s alright. He assures her that he is. He sees that she’s no spring chicken herself. She’s there to walk her dog, a small one that yaps at him.
He sets off with the walker and reaches the first bench on the path. He sits down but the bench is in the shade and the breeze has gotten stronger so after a few minutes he gets up and starts out again. This time his right knee, as it always does, feels balky. He reaches the second bench and gratefully sits down. It’s in the sun and the breeze has died down for the moment. He sits not thinking of anything and taking in the leafed-out trees. He hears some birds singing but doesn’t see any. He sees a squirrel, which darts off. His eyes tear up a little. He gets up and walks back to his car. As he’s putting his walker back in the trunk the same woman appears and asks if he needs any help. He tells her he’s okay. He thinks, I must look pretty old and decrepit if this woman, pretty old herself, thinks I need help.
He drives back to his house and parks the car carefully in the garage. Until next week. He goes back to his computer but not to his column. For some reason he feels impelled to write a poem. He writes:
On a spring day
I walk in the park
Where hand in hand
We used to walk
Then sit on a bench and talk.
Now I sit on the bench alone
A squirrel looks at me inquisitively
She’s gone, I explain. She’s gone.
The squirrel scampers away.
I sit for a while
Then go back to my empty house.
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A Walk in the Park(Martin Green)
2023WalkinPark (Approx. 450 wds.)
A Walk in the Park
Paul Lerner sits in front of his computer. He’s trying to write his column “Observations” for the senior paper that goes to his retirement community every month. He looks at what he’s written and decides that it’s meaningless. He gets up and goes out on his porch. It’s still early and not too warm with a slight breeze. He remembers that he wants to take his car for its weekly drive. At his age he’s all but given up driving but still does so within the retirement community. He doesn’t want to feel that he’s completely confined to his house.
He drives the short distance to the park where he and his wife used to walk. He takes his walker out of the trunk. He no longer trusts himself to be able to walk the circuit of the park’s path with his cane as they used to do. As he enters the park a woman comes alongside him and asks if he’s alright. He assures her that he is. He sees that she’s no spring chicken herself. She’s there to walk her dog, a small one that yaps at him.
He sets off with the walker and reaches the first bench on the path. He sits down but the bench is in the shade and the breeze has gotten stronger so after a few minutes he gets up and starts out again. This time his right knee, as it always does, feels balky. He reaches the second bench and gratefully sits down. It’s in the sun and the breeze has died down for the moment. He sits not thinking of anything and taking in the leafed-out trees. He hears some birds singing but doesn’t see any. He sees a squirrel, which darts off. His eyes tear up a little. He gets up and walks back to his car. As he’s putting his walker back in the trunk the same woman appears and asks if he needs any help. He tells her he’s okay. He thinks, I must look pretty old and decrepit if this woman, pretty old herself, thinks I need help.
He drives back to his house and parks the car carefully in the garage. Until next week. He goes back to his computer but not to his column. For some reason he feels impelled to write a poem. He writes:
On a spring day
I walk in the park
Where hand in hand
We used to walk
Then sit on a bench and talk.
Now I sit on the bench alone
A squirrel looks at me inquisitively
She’s gone, I explain. She’s gone.
The squirrel scampers away.
I sit for a while
Then go back to my empty house.
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Shelly Garrod
07/11/2023Beautifully written Martin.
Happy Short Story Star of the Day.
Blessings Shelly
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Martin Green
07/15/2023Thank you. Shirley. It didn't happen just that way I wrote the poem first & then the story. Martin
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Lillian Kazmierczak
07/11/2023That was heart wrenchingly wonderful. So sad in his loneliness. As always beautifully written! Congratulations on short story star of the day!
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Gerald R Gioglio
07/11/2023Martin, you know what I think about this wonderful piece. Just checkin in to wish you Happy StoryStar Day. grg
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Martin Green
07/15/2023Thank you, Gerald. It was a little painful to write but after the poem I decided to write a story. Martin
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Kevin Hughes
06/04/2023Martin,
This brought tears to my eyes. So beautiful, and Gerald nailed it in his comment. You will have touchd a lot of hearts with this.
Smiles, Kevin
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