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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Fairy Tales & Fantasy
- Subject: Fairy Tale / Folk Tale
- Published: 08/15/2023
Water
F, from Jacksonville/Florida, United StatesWater
Minerva awoke to the soothing sounds of the sea, just as she did each morning. An early riser, she thrived on the solitude of her early morning swim. She meandered through the palace as her family slumbered. Arriving at the terrace, she jettisoned herself into the peaceful serenity of the open water.
She began her routine at mach speed, waking up her body and mind as her lithe form cut through the water like a spear. Invigorated from the aqua sprint, she dove towards the depths of the sea.
Swimming at the ocean bottom, she slowed and admired the tiny seahorses with their tails wrapped around the plant branches. The sand, undisturbed, sparkled as the rays of the morning sun breached the water’s surface and illuminated the ocean floor.
Minerva froze. A Great White shark swam nearby. She prayed the carnivorous creature wouldn’t sense her presence. He appeared occupied with a bloody carcass at the surface. More sharks joined the Great White and his feeding frenzy.
A dark shadow loomed over her, blocking the sun’s rays from the surface. Scared, Minerva knew the shadow’s source before she verified the terrifying object above—a boat.
She swam away and headed home, wishing she’d never left the safety of Atlantis. But a wall of rope came towards her. It extended from the surface to the floor with its sides angled towards her.
She knew the dangers of the net. She’d witnessed it capture her fellow Atlanteans. Retreating from the dangers of mankind’s fishing net, she sensed a presence behind her. Fearful, she turned to face yet another enemy, the Great White shark.
The enormous creature swam towards Minerva, trapping her between the net and his carnivorous intentions. With closed eyes, he lunged towards her, but missed. She darted around the great beast, never taking her eyes off the predator. She realized her mistake as the ropes of the net caught her fin.
The shark retreated and avoided the net. But the net closed around Minerva, and she struggled. Then hopelessness sank in, and she stopped wiggling. Tears flowed as the net lifted her up towards the surface.
Crunched together with a mixture of fish, she saw the morning sun as the net rose Minerva out of the water and onto the wooden deck of the fishing boat.
“Captain, we’ve caught a mermaid!”
Water(Terri Talley Venters)
Water
Minerva awoke to the soothing sounds of the sea, just as she did each morning. An early riser, she thrived on the solitude of her early morning swim. She meandered through the palace as her family slumbered. Arriving at the terrace, she jettisoned herself into the peaceful serenity of the open water.
She began her routine at mach speed, waking up her body and mind as her lithe form cut through the water like a spear. Invigorated from the aqua sprint, she dove towards the depths of the sea.
Swimming at the ocean bottom, she slowed and admired the tiny seahorses with their tails wrapped around the plant branches. The sand, undisturbed, sparkled as the rays of the morning sun breached the water’s surface and illuminated the ocean floor.
Minerva froze. A Great White shark swam nearby. She prayed the carnivorous creature wouldn’t sense her presence. He appeared occupied with a bloody carcass at the surface. More sharks joined the Great White and his feeding frenzy.
A dark shadow loomed over her, blocking the sun’s rays from the surface. Scared, Minerva knew the shadow’s source before she verified the terrifying object above—a boat.
She swam away and headed home, wishing she’d never left the safety of Atlantis. But a wall of rope came towards her. It extended from the surface to the floor with its sides angled towards her.
She knew the dangers of the net. She’d witnessed it capture her fellow Atlanteans. Retreating from the dangers of mankind’s fishing net, she sensed a presence behind her. Fearful, she turned to face yet another enemy, the Great White shark.
The enormous creature swam towards Minerva, trapping her between the net and his carnivorous intentions. With closed eyes, he lunged towards her, but missed. She darted around the great beast, never taking her eyes off the predator. She realized her mistake as the ropes of the net caught her fin.
The shark retreated and avoided the net. But the net closed around Minerva, and she struggled. Then hopelessness sank in, and she stopped wiggling. Tears flowed as the net lifted her up towards the surface.
Crunched together with a mixture of fish, she saw the morning sun as the net rose Minerva out of the water and onto the wooden deck of the fishing boat.
“Captain, we’ve caught a mermaid!”
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Shirley Smothers
09/20/2023What an enchanting tale. I do feel sorry for Minerva but just the thought of Memmaids being real is beauty unto itself. Enjoyed reading this. Made my day a little brighter. Congratulations on Short Story Star of the Day!
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Terri Talley Venters
08/01/2024Thanks for stopping by Shirley! If you love Mermaids, check out my novella Chromium Cauldron! Thrilled to brighten your day.
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Lillian Kazmierczak
09/20/2023A suspenseful read! Nicely written, but I feel there should be more to this. Congratulations on short story star of the day!
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Terri Talley Venters
09/20/2023Thanks Lillian! Water is actually the prologue to my Platinum Princess novella! I’m such a tease!! Glad you stopped by. Terri
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Aziz
09/20/2023Very beautiful story. You dive in the depth of the ocean and implicitly invites the reader to do the same and follow your imagination to some perspectives one should shape by oneself. Very creative mind,Terri.
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Terri Talley Venters
09/20/2023Glad you enjoyed my story! I enjoyed writing water! Thanks for stopping by.
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JD
09/19/2023Oh no.... is how you left me feeling at the end of this one.... I want to know what happens next!
Happy short story star of the day, Terri :-)
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Terri Talley Venters
09/20/2023Funny you should say that! Check out my novella plutonium princess. It is the 6th & last story of my under the magic collection, but can be read alone. Available everywhere ebooks are sold. Thanks for stopping by!
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BEN BROWN
08/16/2023Amazing! That was a fascinatng story. If I were to dive beneath the waves, I'd go in seach of Atlantis. Well done.
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Terri Talley Venters
08/16/2023Thanks for stopping by Ben. Glad you enjoyed it. I’ve written 122 short stories! More coming soon.
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