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- Story Listed as: True Life For Adults
- Theme: Drama / Human Interest
- Subject: Drama
- Published: 06/28/2024
Rain
Born 2006, F, from Pakistan/lahore, Pakistan"You know, Dave," the girl said, not looking up from her diary, "I think the park is the best place to write."
Dave nodded, taking a sip from his water bottle. He'd been watching her scribble away for the past hour, her thoughts spilling onto the pages as if the words themselves were rain. The bench beneath them was a solitary spot of shade under the large oak tree, surrounded by the brittle whispers of dry grass and the occasional rustle of a leaf. The sun had been unrelenting, baking the earth and casting a golden hue across the landscape that seemed to leach the life out of it.
The first droplet hit the page, causing a small, inky blotch. She looked up, her eyes widening in surprise as she saw the clouds rolling in. The second drop fell on her nose, and she giggled, brushing it away with the back of her hand. The sound was like a gunshot in the silence, and within moments, the sky opened up, releasing a torrent of rain.
The ground beneath them seemed to sigh with relief, the dry earth drinking in the life-giving water. The smell of wet earth and freshly cut grass filled the air, mixing with the sweet scent of blooming flowers that had been lying dormant, waiting for this very moment. The rain pattered against the leaves of the oak tree, creating a symphony of sound that surrounded them in a comforting embrace.
The girl closed her diary, tucking it safely under her arm as she watched the world come back to life before her eyes. Raindrops danced on her skin, cool and refreshing, and she took a deep breath, her smile growing wider with every breath.
"This is perfect," she whispered, turning to Dave. "Let's sit here and just listen."
They remained on the bench, the rain cascading around them, creating a wall of white noise that drowned out the world's worries. Her words of gratitude for the rain echoed in his mind, a gentle reminder of the simple beauty that could come from the most unexpected places.
As the storm grew stronger, the rain grew heavier, turning the dusty pathways into streams of life. The girl leaned back, letting the rain soak her hair and clothes, as if she too were a plant reaching up to the sky for nourishment. She closed her eyes, savoring the feeling of the cool droplets on her eyelids.
The scene around them was alive with motion: leaves fluttering in the wind, water droplets racing each other down the tree trunks, and the distant rumble of thunder that grew closer with every beat of her heart. It was as if the park had been reborn in front of their very eyes, and they were the only two people in the world to witness it.
Dave watched her, the rain plastering her hair to her face, her cheeks flushed with joy. He felt a strange kinship with this girl he'd only just met, a shared appreciation for the sudden change in the weather that seemed to mirror the shift in their own lives.
The girl's eyes fluttered open, and she looked at him, her gaze filled with wonder. "Isn't it just amazing?" she asked, her voice barely audible over the din of the rain.
He nodded, unable to find the words to express what he felt. The rain had brought them together, and in that moment, he knew that no matter how much the world had changed, there was always going to be beauty in the most unexpected places.
Rain(Meena)
"You know, Dave," the girl said, not looking up from her diary, "I think the park is the best place to write."
Dave nodded, taking a sip from his water bottle. He'd been watching her scribble away for the past hour, her thoughts spilling onto the pages as if the words themselves were rain. The bench beneath them was a solitary spot of shade under the large oak tree, surrounded by the brittle whispers of dry grass and the occasional rustle of a leaf. The sun had been unrelenting, baking the earth and casting a golden hue across the landscape that seemed to leach the life out of it.
The first droplet hit the page, causing a small, inky blotch. She looked up, her eyes widening in surprise as she saw the clouds rolling in. The second drop fell on her nose, and she giggled, brushing it away with the back of her hand. The sound was like a gunshot in the silence, and within moments, the sky opened up, releasing a torrent of rain.
The ground beneath them seemed to sigh with relief, the dry earth drinking in the life-giving water. The smell of wet earth and freshly cut grass filled the air, mixing with the sweet scent of blooming flowers that had been lying dormant, waiting for this very moment. The rain pattered against the leaves of the oak tree, creating a symphony of sound that surrounded them in a comforting embrace.
The girl closed her diary, tucking it safely under her arm as she watched the world come back to life before her eyes. Raindrops danced on her skin, cool and refreshing, and she took a deep breath, her smile growing wider with every breath.
"This is perfect," she whispered, turning to Dave. "Let's sit here and just listen."
They remained on the bench, the rain cascading around them, creating a wall of white noise that drowned out the world's worries. Her words of gratitude for the rain echoed in his mind, a gentle reminder of the simple beauty that could come from the most unexpected places.
As the storm grew stronger, the rain grew heavier, turning the dusty pathways into streams of life. The girl leaned back, letting the rain soak her hair and clothes, as if she too were a plant reaching up to the sky for nourishment. She closed her eyes, savoring the feeling of the cool droplets on her eyelids.
The scene around them was alive with motion: leaves fluttering in the wind, water droplets racing each other down the tree trunks, and the distant rumble of thunder that grew closer with every beat of her heart. It was as if the park had been reborn in front of their very eyes, and they were the only two people in the world to witness it.
Dave watched her, the rain plastering her hair to her face, her cheeks flushed with joy. He felt a strange kinship with this girl he'd only just met, a shared appreciation for the sudden change in the weather that seemed to mirror the shift in their own lives.
The girl's eyes fluttered open, and she looked at him, her gaze filled with wonder. "Isn't it just amazing?" she asked, her voice barely audible over the din of the rain.
He nodded, unable to find the words to express what he felt. The rain had brought them together, and in that moment, he knew that no matter how much the world had changed, there was always going to be beauty in the most unexpected places.
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Gerald R Gioglio
07/11/2024Wonderfully described. I felt like I was sitting there in the rain with them.
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Cheryl Ryan
07/10/2024This is an entertaining read and also a great inspiration for writers.
I think I might try writing from the park someday during the periods of the rain to experience the feelings poured out from this story.
Thank you for sharing!
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Barry
07/08/2024Incredibly good prose! There is a poetic quality to your writing that surfaces throughout. In this regard, you remind me of Herman Melville, the author of Moby Dick, who was a poet as well as a novelist; occaisionally his descriptive/expository writing had the distinctly lyrical feel of poetry. Additionally, your style is original and nuanced, the way you flesh out a scene, taking ample time to express your deepest thoughts. Your personal 'voice' as a writer comes through loud and clear in this particular offering.
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