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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Horror / Scary
- Published: 10/03/2024
Echoes of the past
Born 1988, M, from Thomaston/Ga, United StatesThe rhythmic whispers of flowing water brushed against the banks of the Cragmore River, a serene contrast to the chaos brewing in the small town of Eldridge. Lights twinkled from the houses by the river, but as the sun dipped beneath the horizon, a shroud of unease settled over the sleepy community. The sight that met the local fishermen was anything but peaceful.
“Dear God,” muttered Harold, his old fishing rod clattering to the ground. There, floating atop the gentle ripples, a body lay lifeless, its pale skin marked with dark symbols that twisted and coiled like sinister vines.
The news spread like wildfire, igniting conversations and sparking fears. While the police conducted their investigations, whispers of the past grew louder, for the town of Eldridge had a secret: a chilling history steeped in rituals and beliefs long shunned.
Enter Max Sterling, a private detective renowned for his unorthodox methods. After receiving a phone call from the town’s mayor, Max made his way to the scene. He wasn’t alone; a small, close-knit group of youthful sleuths had developed a reputation for solving the unsolvable, and they were keenly interested in this case.
The team consisted of Brazil, a tech wizard with a penchant for hacking, Lila, a history enthusiast with an uncanny ability to uncover connections, and Theo, the brawn of the group, although his wisdom often surprised the others. Together, they formed an unlikely alliance with Max.
Upon arrival, the detective examined the scene, his gaze fixed on the marks upon the body. “These symbols… they speak of ancient practices,” he remarked, turning to the gang. “In the 1960s, this river was rumored to be the site of satanic rituals.”
Lila’s eyes sparkled with excitement, her historical curiosity piqued. “There’s a location on the outskirts,” she said, quickly rifling through her backpack to pull out an old, crumbling map. “The ruins of an old church… some believed it was a hub for gatherings during those dark times.”
“Then we need to investigate,” Brazil said, adjusting his glasses. “Let’s see what the past can tell us.”
The group piled into Theo’s beaten-up van, a reliable carrier of dreams and mysteries. As they drove, the conversation bubbled with theories about the deceased. Who was she? How did she end up here? Most importantly: who had marked her body with these horrifying symbols?
Arriving at the ruins just as twilight settled in, they were greeted by the cold gusts of wind blowing through the decaying structure. Moss-covered stones jutted out like teeth in a grim smile, casting shadows that loomed eerily against the moonlight. Together, they swept through the debris, keeping an eye out for any clues that might lead them to the truth.
“This place gives me the creeps,” Theo said, kicking a loose stone. “You think some ghost is going to show up and chastise us for trespassing?”
“Let’s hope it’s not a ghost,” max replied, his instincts sharpening. “Let’s focus on what’s at hand.”
As they split up to investigate, Brazil stumbled upon an old journal half-buried in dirt and grime. The brittle pages were untouched by time, but the content was chilling. It detailed rituals performed by a cult known as The Circle of Shadows, who believed the river was a sacred outlet to the other side.
“Guys! You need to see this!” Brazil yelled excitedly, huddled over the journal.
Gathering around him, the team absorbed the information. The ritual described terrible offerings, meant to appease otherworldly forces. A name stood out amidst the markings—a woman named Elara, said to be a high priestess. Fear gripped them as confusion twisted into a deeper mystery.
“Could she be the one in the river?” Lila suggested, her voice low. “Maybe these markings are part of the ritual.”
“That makes sense, but why now?” Max pondered, flipping through the hastily written pages. “Do you think the cult could still exist?”
His question lingered heavily in the air, underlined by the surrounding darkness. Just then, a soft whisper raced through the ruins, sending a shiver down their spines. “Did you hear that?” Theo asked, glancing nervously at the shadows.
“Let’s check it out,” Max replied, leading the way toward the sound. As they stepped outside, they spotted flickering lights—a group of figures around what appeared to be an altar made of stones. Their rhythmic chanting echoed in the night, igniting a sense of urgency within the detective and his young companions.
“Should we confront them?” Theo whispered, gripping a sturdy branch as though it were a weapon.
“We need to gather evidence first,” Max urged. “Let’s observe.”
Hiding behind the thick trees, they watched as the figures performed an incantation, the atmosphere becoming increasingly tense. Lila documented everything on her phone, while Brazil captured pictures. Suddenly, one of the figures turned, his hood dropping back to reveal a familiar face—the town’s mayor, a man whose charm and influence had always masked an unsettling intensity.
“What’s he doing here?” Brazil hissed, incredulous.
Before they could react, the group at the altar began to sense they were being watched. Panic unfurled within Max, but he held his ground. “We need to leave, now!” he ordered.
The sleuthing team hurried back through the trees, adrenaline pumping through their veins. They reached the van, breathless and shaken.
“What do we do now?” Theo asked, wide-eyed.
“We expose the truth,” Max replied with determination. “Tonight’s ritual shows us that the cult still operates, and we have enough to prove the mayor’s involvement.”
Gathering their evidence, they planned their next steps, steeling themselves for the fight ahead. The investigation had unearthed a dark legacy, one that linked the past with the present. But as the moonlight danced across the Cragmore River, something flickered beneath the surface—echoes of the past, gathering strength, waiting to strike.
As dawn crept into the horizon, a sense of resolve settled over them. They had glimpsed into the shadows, but to chase away the darkness, they needed to shine light on their discoveries. The game was on, and they would unravel the enigma before them, no matter what it took.
And as they drove away, the haunting whispers of the river faded into the background, keeping their secrets locked in murky depths… for now.
Echoes of the past(William Crawford)
The rhythmic whispers of flowing water brushed against the banks of the Cragmore River, a serene contrast to the chaos brewing in the small town of Eldridge. Lights twinkled from the houses by the river, but as the sun dipped beneath the horizon, a shroud of unease settled over the sleepy community. The sight that met the local fishermen was anything but peaceful.
“Dear God,” muttered Harold, his old fishing rod clattering to the ground. There, floating atop the gentle ripples, a body lay lifeless, its pale skin marked with dark symbols that twisted and coiled like sinister vines.
The news spread like wildfire, igniting conversations and sparking fears. While the police conducted their investigations, whispers of the past grew louder, for the town of Eldridge had a secret: a chilling history steeped in rituals and beliefs long shunned.
Enter Max Sterling, a private detective renowned for his unorthodox methods. After receiving a phone call from the town’s mayor, Max made his way to the scene. He wasn’t alone; a small, close-knit group of youthful sleuths had developed a reputation for solving the unsolvable, and they were keenly interested in this case.
The team consisted of Brazil, a tech wizard with a penchant for hacking, Lila, a history enthusiast with an uncanny ability to uncover connections, and Theo, the brawn of the group, although his wisdom often surprised the others. Together, they formed an unlikely alliance with Max.
Upon arrival, the detective examined the scene, his gaze fixed on the marks upon the body. “These symbols… they speak of ancient practices,” he remarked, turning to the gang. “In the 1960s, this river was rumored to be the site of satanic rituals.”
Lila’s eyes sparkled with excitement, her historical curiosity piqued. “There’s a location on the outskirts,” she said, quickly rifling through her backpack to pull out an old, crumbling map. “The ruins of an old church… some believed it was a hub for gatherings during those dark times.”
“Then we need to investigate,” Brazil said, adjusting his glasses. “Let’s see what the past can tell us.”
The group piled into Theo’s beaten-up van, a reliable carrier of dreams and mysteries. As they drove, the conversation bubbled with theories about the deceased. Who was she? How did she end up here? Most importantly: who had marked her body with these horrifying symbols?
Arriving at the ruins just as twilight settled in, they were greeted by the cold gusts of wind blowing through the decaying structure. Moss-covered stones jutted out like teeth in a grim smile, casting shadows that loomed eerily against the moonlight. Together, they swept through the debris, keeping an eye out for any clues that might lead them to the truth.
“This place gives me the creeps,” Theo said, kicking a loose stone. “You think some ghost is going to show up and chastise us for trespassing?”
“Let’s hope it’s not a ghost,” max replied, his instincts sharpening. “Let’s focus on what’s at hand.”
As they split up to investigate, Brazil stumbled upon an old journal half-buried in dirt and grime. The brittle pages were untouched by time, but the content was chilling. It detailed rituals performed by a cult known as The Circle of Shadows, who believed the river was a sacred outlet to the other side.
“Guys! You need to see this!” Brazil yelled excitedly, huddled over the journal.
Gathering around him, the team absorbed the information. The ritual described terrible offerings, meant to appease otherworldly forces. A name stood out amidst the markings—a woman named Elara, said to be a high priestess. Fear gripped them as confusion twisted into a deeper mystery.
“Could she be the one in the river?” Lila suggested, her voice low. “Maybe these markings are part of the ritual.”
“That makes sense, but why now?” Max pondered, flipping through the hastily written pages. “Do you think the cult could still exist?”
His question lingered heavily in the air, underlined by the surrounding darkness. Just then, a soft whisper raced through the ruins, sending a shiver down their spines. “Did you hear that?” Theo asked, glancing nervously at the shadows.
“Let’s check it out,” Max replied, leading the way toward the sound. As they stepped outside, they spotted flickering lights—a group of figures around what appeared to be an altar made of stones. Their rhythmic chanting echoed in the night, igniting a sense of urgency within the detective and his young companions.
“Should we confront them?” Theo whispered, gripping a sturdy branch as though it were a weapon.
“We need to gather evidence first,” Max urged. “Let’s observe.”
Hiding behind the thick trees, they watched as the figures performed an incantation, the atmosphere becoming increasingly tense. Lila documented everything on her phone, while Brazil captured pictures. Suddenly, one of the figures turned, his hood dropping back to reveal a familiar face—the town’s mayor, a man whose charm and influence had always masked an unsettling intensity.
“What’s he doing here?” Brazil hissed, incredulous.
Before they could react, the group at the altar began to sense they were being watched. Panic unfurled within Max, but he held his ground. “We need to leave, now!” he ordered.
The sleuthing team hurried back through the trees, adrenaline pumping through their veins. They reached the van, breathless and shaken.
“What do we do now?” Theo asked, wide-eyed.
“We expose the truth,” Max replied with determination. “Tonight’s ritual shows us that the cult still operates, and we have enough to prove the mayor’s involvement.”
Gathering their evidence, they planned their next steps, steeling themselves for the fight ahead. The investigation had unearthed a dark legacy, one that linked the past with the present. But as the moonlight danced across the Cragmore River, something flickered beneath the surface—echoes of the past, gathering strength, waiting to strike.
As dawn crept into the horizon, a sense of resolve settled over them. They had glimpsed into the shadows, but to chase away the darkness, they needed to shine light on their discoveries. The game was on, and they would unravel the enigma before them, no matter what it took.
And as they drove away, the haunting whispers of the river faded into the background, keeping their secrets locked in murky depths… for now.
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Shelly Garrod
10/08/2024Great story telling. What lurks in those mystic waters? Would love to read more.
Blessings, Shelly
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Cheryl Ryan
10/08/2024You are a wonderful writer and this is a great story. If there is a series to this, I will look forward to reading it.
Thank you for sharing!
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Shirley Smothers
10/08/2024I love this. Will there be a part two? I hope so because you've got me wanting more. Congratulations on Short Story Star of the Day.
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Joel Kiula
10/03/2024Interesting story indeed. There is always a sense of fear when it comes to uncover what has been kept as a secret by a certain group of people. Can't wait for the second part if there is any.
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