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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Horror
- Subject: Action
- Published: 10/03/2024
The whispering Dark
Born 1988, M, from Thomaston/Ga, United StatesIn the small town of Maplewood, Pennsylvania, the sun shone brightly through the broken clouds, illuminating remnants of what was once a quaint community. The tornado had swept through like an angry god, tearing roofs from houses and splintering streetlamps, leaving only destruction in its wake. But as the townsfolk began to sift through debris, the ground itself had revealed its own secrets—a deep chasm opening up where the old cemetery once stood.
The police captain, Marina Hale, was wary but hopeful. "We need cave divers," she instructed her officers sternly. She believed there might be answers below the surface, remnants not just of the past, but of a time long buried. The rescue team descended into the catacombs, their lights illuminating the damp, earthen walls etched with ancient symbols.
Among them was Derek, a seasoned cave diver with an insatiable curiosity. As he maneuvered through the narrow tunnels, the atmosphere grew heavier, as if the air itself was charged with a dark energy. After hours of investigation, the team stumbled upon a large stone door at the end of the catacomb. Derek felt the thrill of discovery pulse in his veins, but something sinister lingered in the shadows.
With a grunt, they shifted the door, its groans echoing through the crypt. Beyond lay a vast mausoleum, and in the center was an ornate sarcophagus, adorned with grotesque carvings of twisted, monstrous faces. Derek approached, peering into the darkness. As he pried open the lid, the air turned frigid.
Inside lay a mummified being, something that resembled a human yet felt undeniably wrong, like a painting brought to life by nightmares. Before he could catch his breath, Derek heard a click behind him—a trap had been triggered. A blast of poison gas filled the air, sealing his fate. The last sound he heard was the horrid crackle of his own body as it slumped forward, blood pooling into the sarcophagus.
As if summoned by the malevolent force of the room, the mummy stirred. The blood began to shimmer and swirl, enveloping the figure in an unholy light. Slowly, it morphed into a tall, shadowy figure—a warlock, cloaked in the vestiges of a long-dead era. He opened his eyes, hollow but alive, and a sinister smile crept across his face.
A year passed, the town rebuilt itself from the devastation, blissfully unaware of the evil lurking beneath their feet, waiting.
When a new group of four adventurous archaeologists—Lila, Jamie, Rachael, and Sam—arrived in Maplewood, excitement crackled between them like static. Their professor had sent them to explore clues left in ancient tombs and, unbeknownst to them, would lead them straight into chaos. They heard whispers of the town’s history: an old cemetery haunted by restless spirits, stories that seemed like myths but sent an involuntary shiver down their spines.
Upon finding the cracked ground above the restored area, they were drawn in, eager to uncover the past lying in wait. After a quick excavation, they uncovered the entrance to the catacombs, mirroring the ones Derek had explored months prior. The deeper they went, the greater the sense of foreboding settled in. A chill wrapped around their hearts, the kind born from an awareness of being watched.
They soon found themselves faced with the same door Derek had. With a cautious push, they entered the mausoleum. Rachael was the first to notice the sarcophagus, eerily half-open. "We should be careful," she whispered, unease flooding her voice. But curiosity, like a wicked friend, urged them closer.
As they examined the room, the air thickened, and shadows flickered along the walls. Suddenly, the temperature plummeted, and the ground trembled in a low growl. The warlock, having carefully concealed himself for a year, emerged from the depths. His form coiled and writhed like mist, pulsating darkly.
“Who dares to disturb my slumber?” his voice was a whisper that crawled under their skin.
They stumbled back, gathering their wits. Sam, ever the bravest, shouted, "We’re here to uncover the truth!" with a mix of bravado and fear. The warlock laughed, a sound that echoed through the halls like shattered glass.
“Innocence is a sweet lie,” he hissed, raising his arms. The mist thickened, wrapping around them, threatening to engulf their very souls. As Lila's heart raced, the promise of death lingered in the air.
But Rachael recalled an old tale shared by the antique dealer in town, a man who had whispered fragments of a secret society connected to the supernatural. He had spoken of a grimoire hidden in the town's museum, a book woven with ancient magic that could bind the warlock back in the sarcophagus forever.
“Where’s the museum?” Jamie shouted above the growing dread.
“The old library district!” Rachael yelled, urging the group to flee. They dashed through the mausoleum, the warlock’s cold laughter echoing behind them, threatening to gnaw at their resolve.
Through twists and turns, they navigated the darkness, finally emerging into the light of the outside world. They raced toward the museum, adrenaline coursing through them as fear drove their legs.
Inside, they found the dusty hall lined with relics of the town’s forgotten history, a nesting ground for the grim whispers of the past. The librarian, an elderly woman with eyes like onyx marbles, guided them to a hidden chamber.
“Be warned,” she said, “the grimoire is protected by dark forces.” But courage triumphed as Rachael opened the ancient tome, deciphering the unfamiliar runes woven among the pages.
Life rushed back to them, invigorated by the sense of purpose. They returned to the mausoleum, ready for the final confrontation against the warlock. The darkness gathered around them, but Rachael, emboldened with resolve, chanted words from the grimoire, her voice ringing clear against the darkness.
“Back to the shadows, you do not belong! The bonds of old shall hold you strong!”
With each utterance, the wind howled in fury, and the warlock shrieked, splitting the air with rage. Tendrils of darkness surrounded him but, as the words illuminated the cold space, he began to shrink, caught in an invisible trap.
With a final thundering shout and a blinding flash of light, he was engulfed, pulled back into the sarcophagus, sealing it once more in ancient power. The air shimmered, and silence fell like a heavy blanket over the mausoleum.
The four archaeologists held their breath, trembling but victorious. The darkness lay still. They had thwarted an ancient evil for now—its whispers echoing only faintly, but the shadows would always linger. Maplewood was safe, but the complexities of the supernatural stretched far beyond their understanding.
As they emerged into the sunlight, a distant whisper drifted through the breeze, a reminder that some stories never truly end—only wait for their time to be told once more.
The whispering Dark(William Crawford)
In the small town of Maplewood, Pennsylvania, the sun shone brightly through the broken clouds, illuminating remnants of what was once a quaint community. The tornado had swept through like an angry god, tearing roofs from houses and splintering streetlamps, leaving only destruction in its wake. But as the townsfolk began to sift through debris, the ground itself had revealed its own secrets—a deep chasm opening up where the old cemetery once stood.
The police captain, Marina Hale, was wary but hopeful. "We need cave divers," she instructed her officers sternly. She believed there might be answers below the surface, remnants not just of the past, but of a time long buried. The rescue team descended into the catacombs, their lights illuminating the damp, earthen walls etched with ancient symbols.
Among them was Derek, a seasoned cave diver with an insatiable curiosity. As he maneuvered through the narrow tunnels, the atmosphere grew heavier, as if the air itself was charged with a dark energy. After hours of investigation, the team stumbled upon a large stone door at the end of the catacomb. Derek felt the thrill of discovery pulse in his veins, but something sinister lingered in the shadows.
With a grunt, they shifted the door, its groans echoing through the crypt. Beyond lay a vast mausoleum, and in the center was an ornate sarcophagus, adorned with grotesque carvings of twisted, monstrous faces. Derek approached, peering into the darkness. As he pried open the lid, the air turned frigid.
Inside lay a mummified being, something that resembled a human yet felt undeniably wrong, like a painting brought to life by nightmares. Before he could catch his breath, Derek heard a click behind him—a trap had been triggered. A blast of poison gas filled the air, sealing his fate. The last sound he heard was the horrid crackle of his own body as it slumped forward, blood pooling into the sarcophagus.
As if summoned by the malevolent force of the room, the mummy stirred. The blood began to shimmer and swirl, enveloping the figure in an unholy light. Slowly, it morphed into a tall, shadowy figure—a warlock, cloaked in the vestiges of a long-dead era. He opened his eyes, hollow but alive, and a sinister smile crept across his face.
A year passed, the town rebuilt itself from the devastation, blissfully unaware of the evil lurking beneath their feet, waiting.
When a new group of four adventurous archaeologists—Lila, Jamie, Rachael, and Sam—arrived in Maplewood, excitement crackled between them like static. Their professor had sent them to explore clues left in ancient tombs and, unbeknownst to them, would lead them straight into chaos. They heard whispers of the town’s history: an old cemetery haunted by restless spirits, stories that seemed like myths but sent an involuntary shiver down their spines.
Upon finding the cracked ground above the restored area, they were drawn in, eager to uncover the past lying in wait. After a quick excavation, they uncovered the entrance to the catacombs, mirroring the ones Derek had explored months prior. The deeper they went, the greater the sense of foreboding settled in. A chill wrapped around their hearts, the kind born from an awareness of being watched.
They soon found themselves faced with the same door Derek had. With a cautious push, they entered the mausoleum. Rachael was the first to notice the sarcophagus, eerily half-open. "We should be careful," she whispered, unease flooding her voice. But curiosity, like a wicked friend, urged them closer.
As they examined the room, the air thickened, and shadows flickered along the walls. Suddenly, the temperature plummeted, and the ground trembled in a low growl. The warlock, having carefully concealed himself for a year, emerged from the depths. His form coiled and writhed like mist, pulsating darkly.
“Who dares to disturb my slumber?” his voice was a whisper that crawled under their skin.
They stumbled back, gathering their wits. Sam, ever the bravest, shouted, "We’re here to uncover the truth!" with a mix of bravado and fear. The warlock laughed, a sound that echoed through the halls like shattered glass.
“Innocence is a sweet lie,” he hissed, raising his arms. The mist thickened, wrapping around them, threatening to engulf their very souls. As Lila's heart raced, the promise of death lingered in the air.
But Rachael recalled an old tale shared by the antique dealer in town, a man who had whispered fragments of a secret society connected to the supernatural. He had spoken of a grimoire hidden in the town's museum, a book woven with ancient magic that could bind the warlock back in the sarcophagus forever.
“Where’s the museum?” Jamie shouted above the growing dread.
“The old library district!” Rachael yelled, urging the group to flee. They dashed through the mausoleum, the warlock’s cold laughter echoing behind them, threatening to gnaw at their resolve.
Through twists and turns, they navigated the darkness, finally emerging into the light of the outside world. They raced toward the museum, adrenaline coursing through them as fear drove their legs.
Inside, they found the dusty hall lined with relics of the town’s forgotten history, a nesting ground for the grim whispers of the past. The librarian, an elderly woman with eyes like onyx marbles, guided them to a hidden chamber.
“Be warned,” she said, “the grimoire is protected by dark forces.” But courage triumphed as Rachael opened the ancient tome, deciphering the unfamiliar runes woven among the pages.
Life rushed back to them, invigorated by the sense of purpose. They returned to the mausoleum, ready for the final confrontation against the warlock. The darkness gathered around them, but Rachael, emboldened with resolve, chanted words from the grimoire, her voice ringing clear against the darkness.
“Back to the shadows, you do not belong! The bonds of old shall hold you strong!”
With each utterance, the wind howled in fury, and the warlock shrieked, splitting the air with rage. Tendrils of darkness surrounded him but, as the words illuminated the cold space, he began to shrink, caught in an invisible trap.
With a final thundering shout and a blinding flash of light, he was engulfed, pulled back into the sarcophagus, sealing it once more in ancient power. The air shimmered, and silence fell like a heavy blanket over the mausoleum.
The four archaeologists held their breath, trembling but victorious. The darkness lay still. They had thwarted an ancient evil for now—its whispers echoing only faintly, but the shadows would always linger. Maplewood was safe, but the complexities of the supernatural stretched far beyond their understanding.
As they emerged into the sunlight, a distant whisper drifted through the breeze, a reminder that some stories never truly end—only wait for their time to be told once more.
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Alan gergen
10/22/2024The writing is under great control with a wonderful balance of sentene lengths, apt word choices and good pacing. My problem is with the plot holes. 1. Why does the police officer call for a dive team? 2. What happens to those who helped Derek open the stone door of the crypt? 3. How does Derek bleed into the sarcophagas if he has only been poisoned? 4. Why does nobody in the town find it odd that the dive team did not return? Didn't they investigate the disappearance? 5. What has the warlock been doing for the past year? Just sitting around? 6. What happened to Derek's body? It has only been a year. 7. Does the warlock easily let the archeologists just run out and run back in again? Seems like kind of a lame warlock - all threat and no action.
I think that the answers to these questions being incoporated into the story would make for a realistic read of a well-written piece.
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Joel Kiula
10/06/2024This is a very good story. I always tell people to stay away from those ancient things, so many things were buried that they never meant to be found.
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Denise Arnault
10/04/2024Spooky and timely. I thought that your building of the suspense was rather good. The final line was a gripper!
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