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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Creatures & Monsters
- Published: 11/19/2024
Adrift
Born 2009, M, from Gävle, SwedenThe endless horizon stretched like a cruel joke, mocking him with its boundless emptiness. For days—maybe weeks—Jack had been adrift in the small lifeboat, a speck on the immeasurable expanse of the ocean. The sun beat down relentlessly, baking his skin until it cracked, and his lips were parched to the point of bleeding. His water supply had run out two days ago. The stale, salty tang of the sea breeze only deepened his thirst.
He had stopped hoping for rescue. The shipping lanes were far away, and his tiny boat might as well have been invisible from the air. At first, he’d tried to ration his supplies, to keep his wits about him. But hope, fragile as it was, had crumbled under the weight of his isolation.
Until he saw the boat.
It appeared on the horizon like a mirage, its hull reflecting a faint glint of sunlight. At first, Jack thought it was another cruel trick of the mind—a hallucination brought on by dehydration and despair. But as the boat drew closer, its shape became undeniable: a mid-sized fishing trawler, its weathered paint streaked with rust, its masts standing like skeletal fingers against the blue sky.
Jack scrambled to his knees, nearly capsizing his lifeboat in his frantic movements. He waved his arms, shouting with what little strength he had left. “Hey! Over here! Please!”
The trawler drew nearer, its engines silent. Jack’s heart pounded with a mix of elation and unease. There was no sign of anyone on deck. No crew leaning over the railings to spot him, no churning of water from its propellers.
The trawler coasted lazily toward him, carried by the currents. Jack’s lifeboat bumped against its hull with a dull thud. He clung to the side of the larger vessel, staring up at the rusted ladder that dangled from its deck.
“Hello?” he called, his voice cracking. “Anyone there?”
No answer.
He hesitated, staring at the dark windows of the wheelhouse. An eerie stillness hung over the trawler, as if it had been abandoned mid-voyage. But Jack’s desperation outweighed his fear. He needed water. Shelter. Anything.
Grunting with effort, he climbed the ladder, his limbs weak and trembling. When he reached the deck, the air was thick with the stench of rotting fish and salt. The trawler’s nets were still full, tangled with the remnants of a haul long left to decay.
Jack moved cautiously, stepping around puddles of seawater and broken equipment. The wheelhouse door hung ajar, creaking slightly in the breeze. He pushed it open and stepped inside.
The cabin was a mess—charts and papers strewn across the floor, a coffee mug overturned on the control panel. The air was stifling, reeking of mildew and something sour. But what struck Jack most was the absence of any sign of the crew. Life jackets hung neatly on the wall. The radio sat silent, its knobs untouched.
Jack searched the trawler methodically, calling out as he moved through the cramped quarters. “Hello? Is anyone here? I’m… I’m stranded! I need help!”
Nothing. Only the groaning of the hull and the occasional slap of waves against the boat.
In the galley, he found a few bottles of water and a stash of canned food. He drank greedily, the cool liquid burning his throat, and devoured a tin of sardines without a second thought. Strength returned to his limbs, but so did unease. The more he explored, the clearer it became: the crew had vanished without a trace.
Back on deck, Jack spotted a logbook tucked into a compartment near the wheel. Flipping through its pages, he found the entries stopped abruptly two weeks ago. The last note was scrawled hastily:
“Something is wrong. Hear noises below deck. Can’t explain it. Will check it out. If anyone reads this…” The writing trailed off.
A chill ran through Jack despite the heat. He glanced toward the hatch leading to the lower holds, where the cargo and engine rooms lay. The metal hatch was slightly ajar, darkness yawning beneath it.
He approached cautiously, his breath hitching. The idea of going below deck filled him with dread, but his curiosity gnawed at him. What had happened here? And why had the crew left in such a hurry—if they’d left at all?
Gripping a flashlight he’d found in the wheelhouse, Jack pulled the hatch open and descended the narrow staircase. The beam of light cut through the darkness, revealing a claustrophobic corridor slick with seawater. The air was colder here, damp and oppressive.
“Hello?” he called again, his voice echoing.
A sound answered him—soft, wet, and rhythmic, like something being dragged. Jack froze, his heart hammering. The beam of his flashlight trembled as he swung it toward the source of the noise.
At the far end of the corridor, something moved.
It was too dark to make out details, but the shape was unmistakable: a hunched figure, its outline twisted and wrong. It turned toward him slowly, and Jack’s flashlight caught the gleam of something slick and wet—too many limbs, glistening with seawater, eyes that shone like glass in the light.
Jack stumbled backward, his breath coming in gasps. The figure began to move toward him, its dragging footsteps echoing in the narrow space.
Panic surged through him. He turned and fled up the stairs, slamming the hatch shut behind him and jamming a rusted wrench into the latch. The thing below pounded against the metal, its inhuman wails reverberating through the hull.
Jack staggered back to the lifeboat, shaking. As he pushed away from the trawler, the pounding grew fainter, but the image of that twisted figure remained burned into his mind.
The ocean stretched out before him once more, vast and empty. But this time, he wasn’t sure which fate was worse: the despair of isolation, or the horrors that lay in wait on that ghostly vessel.
Adrift(Jonas Wennmark)
The endless horizon stretched like a cruel joke, mocking him with its boundless emptiness. For days—maybe weeks—Jack had been adrift in the small lifeboat, a speck on the immeasurable expanse of the ocean. The sun beat down relentlessly, baking his skin until it cracked, and his lips were parched to the point of bleeding. His water supply had run out two days ago. The stale, salty tang of the sea breeze only deepened his thirst.
He had stopped hoping for rescue. The shipping lanes were far away, and his tiny boat might as well have been invisible from the air. At first, he’d tried to ration his supplies, to keep his wits about him. But hope, fragile as it was, had crumbled under the weight of his isolation.
Until he saw the boat.
It appeared on the horizon like a mirage, its hull reflecting a faint glint of sunlight. At first, Jack thought it was another cruel trick of the mind—a hallucination brought on by dehydration and despair. But as the boat drew closer, its shape became undeniable: a mid-sized fishing trawler, its weathered paint streaked with rust, its masts standing like skeletal fingers against the blue sky.
Jack scrambled to his knees, nearly capsizing his lifeboat in his frantic movements. He waved his arms, shouting with what little strength he had left. “Hey! Over here! Please!”
The trawler drew nearer, its engines silent. Jack’s heart pounded with a mix of elation and unease. There was no sign of anyone on deck. No crew leaning over the railings to spot him, no churning of water from its propellers.
The trawler coasted lazily toward him, carried by the currents. Jack’s lifeboat bumped against its hull with a dull thud. He clung to the side of the larger vessel, staring up at the rusted ladder that dangled from its deck.
“Hello?” he called, his voice cracking. “Anyone there?”
No answer.
He hesitated, staring at the dark windows of the wheelhouse. An eerie stillness hung over the trawler, as if it had been abandoned mid-voyage. But Jack’s desperation outweighed his fear. He needed water. Shelter. Anything.
Grunting with effort, he climbed the ladder, his limbs weak and trembling. When he reached the deck, the air was thick with the stench of rotting fish and salt. The trawler’s nets were still full, tangled with the remnants of a haul long left to decay.
Jack moved cautiously, stepping around puddles of seawater and broken equipment. The wheelhouse door hung ajar, creaking slightly in the breeze. He pushed it open and stepped inside.
The cabin was a mess—charts and papers strewn across the floor, a coffee mug overturned on the control panel. The air was stifling, reeking of mildew and something sour. But what struck Jack most was the absence of any sign of the crew. Life jackets hung neatly on the wall. The radio sat silent, its knobs untouched.
Jack searched the trawler methodically, calling out as he moved through the cramped quarters. “Hello? Is anyone here? I’m… I’m stranded! I need help!”
Nothing. Only the groaning of the hull and the occasional slap of waves against the boat.
In the galley, he found a few bottles of water and a stash of canned food. He drank greedily, the cool liquid burning his throat, and devoured a tin of sardines without a second thought. Strength returned to his limbs, but so did unease. The more he explored, the clearer it became: the crew had vanished without a trace.
Back on deck, Jack spotted a logbook tucked into a compartment near the wheel. Flipping through its pages, he found the entries stopped abruptly two weeks ago. The last note was scrawled hastily:
“Something is wrong. Hear noises below deck. Can’t explain it. Will check it out. If anyone reads this…” The writing trailed off.
A chill ran through Jack despite the heat. He glanced toward the hatch leading to the lower holds, where the cargo and engine rooms lay. The metal hatch was slightly ajar, darkness yawning beneath it.
He approached cautiously, his breath hitching. The idea of going below deck filled him with dread, but his curiosity gnawed at him. What had happened here? And why had the crew left in such a hurry—if they’d left at all?
Gripping a flashlight he’d found in the wheelhouse, Jack pulled the hatch open and descended the narrow staircase. The beam of light cut through the darkness, revealing a claustrophobic corridor slick with seawater. The air was colder here, damp and oppressive.
“Hello?” he called again, his voice echoing.
A sound answered him—soft, wet, and rhythmic, like something being dragged. Jack froze, his heart hammering. The beam of his flashlight trembled as he swung it toward the source of the noise.
At the far end of the corridor, something moved.
It was too dark to make out details, but the shape was unmistakable: a hunched figure, its outline twisted and wrong. It turned toward him slowly, and Jack’s flashlight caught the gleam of something slick and wet—too many limbs, glistening with seawater, eyes that shone like glass in the light.
Jack stumbled backward, his breath coming in gasps. The figure began to move toward him, its dragging footsteps echoing in the narrow space.
Panic surged through him. He turned and fled up the stairs, slamming the hatch shut behind him and jamming a rusted wrench into the latch. The thing below pounded against the metal, its inhuman wails reverberating through the hull.
Jack staggered back to the lifeboat, shaking. As he pushed away from the trawler, the pounding grew fainter, but the image of that twisted figure remained burned into his mind.
The ocean stretched out before him once more, vast and empty. But this time, he wasn’t sure which fate was worse: the despair of isolation, or the horrors that lay in wait on that ghostly vessel.
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Cheryl Ryan
11/23/2024It is well-written and flows nicely. This story is about grit, survival and determination in a vast, scary empty ocean.
Thank you for sharing!
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Kevin Hughes
11/23/2024Jonas,
As you can tell from the thread...that was a marvelous tale. Over here on this side of the pond, we call stories like this: "Campfire Stories." Stories told late at night, in the dark, around a campfire. Where all the listeners hang on every word and everyone gets the jitters wondering what is lurking out in the dark. You got all of us to feel that feeling.
Congrats on StoryStar of the Day!
Smiles, Kevin
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BEN BROWN
11/23/2024An amazing story. While reading it I thought about the Flying Dutchman. Well done for being todays star.
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Joel Kiula
11/23/2024I would never play games in those situations. The ocean is a scary place for sure.
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Denise Arnault
11/23/2024Very good story.
I always read these type of stories with the back of my mind saying what would I do, and I'm not sure I would have left the ship. We are left wondering what the heck they pulled up from the ocean.
Well done!
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Gerald R Gioglio
11/23/2024Lots of tension and fear in this work. Enjoyed it. Happy Story Star day.
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