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  • Story Listed as: Fiction For Adults
  • Theme: Mystery
  • Subject: Mystery
  • Published: 01/21/2025

Mark My Words

By CPlatt
Born 1975, M, from Manchester, United Kingdom
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Mark My Words

MARK MY WORDS.
BY CHRIS PLATT.

Mark was flaked out in front of the television, watching a film. He was about to get another beer from the fridge when there was a knock at the door.
He checked the time. Eight-thirty. He wasn’t expecting anyone, but it wasn’t too late in the evening. Gone ten o’clock, he would have ignored the door, letting whoever was there try again at a more reasonable hour. He expected it would either be his neighbour asking a favour, or a delivery driver with a package he had ordered.
He opened the door and gasped.
He recognised the man in the dark overcoat immediately. He looked every inch the gangster. He looked like a movie villain from a Martin Scorsese picture. Mark stood there, motionless for a moment.
‘You know who I am?’ The man asked.
Mark nodded. When a guy like Carlo Palazini knocked on your door, you answered. The guy was well-known to have connections to the New York mafia and the Falcone crime family. He was a dangerous individual. Before he could invite him in, Carlo walked in anyway.
Mark closed the front door and followed Carlo into the living room.
‘What are you doing here? I can’t believe this is happening.’ Mark said.
‘Well, here I am. Did you really think you could get away with it?’
Mark watched the mobster pacing his living room carpet impatiently.
‘You owe me ten thousand. I want it by Friday.’
‘Ten thousand? How am I supposed to come up with that? I won’t have the time to get that together.’ Mark protested.
‘Ten grand, Mark! You better think of something. A debt is a debt, and a deadline is a deadline. You don’t want to know what will happen if you don’t meet the deadline. Let’s just say, the answer is in the question.’ Carlo said.
Mark nodded.
‘I’ll have to work on it, make a few plans.’ Mark said finally.
‘Do what you have to.’
Mark nodded again.

Carlo sank into an armchair, pulling his tie loose an inch. He reached a hand in his coat, to the small of his back, and pulled out a pistol. Mark flinched at the sight of the weapon.
Carlo placed the gun on the coffee table in front of him. Removing the pistol from its holster seemed as natural to the mobster as kicking off your shoes, making yourself comfortable.
‘This business, this life of ours, it isn’t the easiest, y’know? All folks see is the money, the fancy suits, the Cadillacs, the respect, the power. The good life, they call it. But what we have to do, it takes its toll. It’s not exactly a walk in the park.’ Carlo sighed.
Mark felt like replying that Carlo should try being on the other side, see how he liked being on the receiving end of the mobster’s threats, but you didn’t speak to a man like Carlo that way. Instead he asked if he could get Carlo a drink.
‘Whiskey, Irish, if you’ve got it.’ Carlo said.
‘Coming right up.’
As they sipped their whiskies, Carlo pointed to the paused film on screen.
‘This is how you’re spending your time now?’ Carlo said. ‘You have a deadline to meet and you are drinking beer and watching movies?’

Mark downed the last of his whiskey and went to the kitchen for a refill. When he returned Carlo was gone. The mobster had made his point, had said all he had to say. Mark took a hit of whiskey.
Mark booted up his laptop and opened up a word document. He had work to do. Carlo had been quite clear. He had to produce ten thousand words by Friday. The next time he spoke to his publisher, Mark would neglect to mention that his fictional main character had knocked on the door demanding he start the new crime novel.

Chapter One.
When a guy like Carlo Palazini knocked on your door, you answered.

Mark My Words(CPlatt) MARK MY WORDS.
BY CHRIS PLATT.

Mark was flaked out in front of the television, watching a film. He was about to get another beer from the fridge when there was a knock at the door.
He checked the time. Eight-thirty. He wasn’t expecting anyone, but it wasn’t too late in the evening. Gone ten o’clock, he would have ignored the door, letting whoever was there try again at a more reasonable hour. He expected it would either be his neighbour asking a favour, or a delivery driver with a package he had ordered.
He opened the door and gasped.
He recognised the man in the dark overcoat immediately. He looked every inch the gangster. He looked like a movie villain from a Martin Scorsese picture. Mark stood there, motionless for a moment.
‘You know who I am?’ The man asked.
Mark nodded. When a guy like Carlo Palazini knocked on your door, you answered. The guy was well-known to have connections to the New York mafia and the Falcone crime family. He was a dangerous individual. Before he could invite him in, Carlo walked in anyway.
Mark closed the front door and followed Carlo into the living room.
‘What are you doing here? I can’t believe this is happening.’ Mark said.
‘Well, here I am. Did you really think you could get away with it?’
Mark watched the mobster pacing his living room carpet impatiently.
‘You owe me ten thousand. I want it by Friday.’
‘Ten thousand? How am I supposed to come up with that? I won’t have the time to get that together.’ Mark protested.
‘Ten grand, Mark! You better think of something. A debt is a debt, and a deadline is a deadline. You don’t want to know what will happen if you don’t meet the deadline. Let’s just say, the answer is in the question.’ Carlo said.
Mark nodded.
‘I’ll have to work on it, make a few plans.’ Mark said finally.
‘Do what you have to.’
Mark nodded again.

Carlo sank into an armchair, pulling his tie loose an inch. He reached a hand in his coat, to the small of his back, and pulled out a pistol. Mark flinched at the sight of the weapon.
Carlo placed the gun on the coffee table in front of him. Removing the pistol from its holster seemed as natural to the mobster as kicking off your shoes, making yourself comfortable.
‘This business, this life of ours, it isn’t the easiest, y’know? All folks see is the money, the fancy suits, the Cadillacs, the respect, the power. The good life, they call it. But what we have to do, it takes its toll. It’s not exactly a walk in the park.’ Carlo sighed.
Mark felt like replying that Carlo should try being on the other side, see how he liked being on the receiving end of the mobster’s threats, but you didn’t speak to a man like Carlo that way. Instead he asked if he could get Carlo a drink.
‘Whiskey, Irish, if you’ve got it.’ Carlo said.
‘Coming right up.’
As they sipped their whiskies, Carlo pointed to the paused film on screen.
‘This is how you’re spending your time now?’ Carlo said. ‘You have a deadline to meet and you are drinking beer and watching movies?’

Mark downed the last of his whiskey and went to the kitchen for a refill. When he returned Carlo was gone. The mobster had made his point, had said all he had to say. Mark took a hit of whiskey.
Mark booted up his laptop and opened up a word document. He had work to do. Carlo had been quite clear. He had to produce ten thousand words by Friday. The next time he spoke to his publisher, Mark would neglect to mention that his fictional main character had knocked on the door demanding he start the new crime novel.

Chapter One.
When a guy like Carlo Palazini knocked on your door, you answered.

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Marla

06/20/2025

Good job! I didn't see that coming.

Good job! I didn't see that coming.

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CPlatt

06/23/2025

Thanks, Marla. Really appreciated. Cheers, Chris.

Thanks, Marla. Really appreciated. Cheers, Chris.

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Shirley Smothers

04/06/2025

Cool! Did not except this twist. Enjoyed reading this. Congratulations on Short Story Star of the Day.

Cool! Did not except this twist. Enjoyed reading this. Congratulations on Short Story Star of the Day.

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CPlatt

04/07/2025

Thanks so much for your comments, Shirley. Really appreciated.

Thanks so much for your comments, Shirley. Really appreciated.

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Gerald R Gioglio

04/06/2025

So cool, Chris. Loved it.

So cool, Chris. Loved it.

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CPlatt

04/07/2025

Thanks so much, Gerald. Really appreciated.

Thanks so much, Gerald. Really appreciated.

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Jessica M.

04/05/2025

It's incredible how much suspense you've managed to build in such a short story! Fantastic work! You can surely evolve this into a longer story, if you'd like.

It's incredible how much suspense you've managed to build in such a short story! Fantastic work! You can surely evolve this into a longer story, if you'd like.

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CPlatt

04/07/2025

Thanks for your comments, Jessica. My family and friends read my stories and they always say I should write sequels to them as they want to know what happens next. :-)

Thanks for your comments, Jessica. My family and friends read my stories and they always say I should write sequels to them as they want to know what happens next. :-)

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Donald Harry Roberts

04/05/2025

Nicely done

Nicely done

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CPlatt

04/07/2025

Thanks Donald.

Thanks Donald.

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Cheryl Ryan

04/05/2025

That was a wonderfully eerie and suspenseful read! The way you built tension with the knock at the door had me hooked, and the twist at the end was both chilling and clever. Thank you for sharing!

That was a wonderfully eerie and suspenseful read! The way you built tension with the knock at the door had me hooked, and the twist at the end was both chilling and clever. Thank you for sharing!

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CPlatt

04/07/2025

Thanks so much, Cheryl. Really appreciated.

Thanks so much, Cheryl. Really appreciated.

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Barry

04/05/2025

Here's the deal: back to my college years I used to think that short (i.e. flash) fiction didn't work. That was then, this is now. Incredibly clever and entertaining fiction. A real good read!

Here's the deal: back to my college years I used to think that short (i.e. flash) fiction didn't work. That was then, this is now. Incredibly clever and entertaining fiction. A real good read!

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CPlatt

04/06/2025

Thanks, Barry. Appreciate the comments.

Thanks, Barry. Appreciate the comments.

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BEN BROWN

04/05/2025

A very well written story. Well done for being todays star.

A very well written story. Well done for being todays star.

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CPlatt

04/06/2025

Thanks a lot, Ben. Really appreciated. :)

Thanks a lot, Ben. Really appreciated. :)

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Kevin Hughes

04/04/2025

Aloha CPlatt,
Well I was sure this would win an Award. After all, I laughed out loud at the end of it, and told you so when I first commented on the story - way back in January. It was a delight to read then, and nothing has changed. It was a delight to read again!

Congrats.

Smiles, Kevin

Aloha CPlatt,
Well I was sure this would win an Award. After all, I laughed out loud at the end of it, and told you so when I first commented on the story - way back in January. It was a delight to read then, and nothing has changed. It was a delight to read again!

Congrats.

Smiles, Kevin

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CPlatt

04/06/2025

Thanks a lot, my friend. Really appreciated. Cheers, Chris.

Thanks a lot, my friend. Really appreciated. Cheers, Chris.

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JD

04/04/2025

That was FUN! Happy short story star of the day, CP.

That was FUN! Happy short story star of the day, CP.

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CPlatt

04/06/2025

Thanks so much, JD. Really appreciated.

Thanks so much, JD. Really appreciated.

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Martha Huett

01/24/2025

What a great story ending! Hahaha. Loved it. Thanks Chris!

What a great story ending! Hahaha. Loved it. Thanks Chris!

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CPlatt

01/27/2025

Thanks so much, Martha. Really appreciated.

Thanks so much, Martha. Really appreciated.

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Denise Arnault

01/22/2025

That was very well played. I did not even suspect until the end. Well done Chris!

That was very well played. I did not even suspect until the end. Well done Chris!

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CPlatt

01/23/2025

Thanks a lot, Denise. It's an idea I've written about in the past, when your fictional character calls round demanding you write the story. It's not happened to me yet. :-) Thanks again, Chris.

Thanks a lot, Denise. It's an idea I've written about in the past, when your fictional character calls round demanding you write the story. It's not happened to me yet. :-) Thanks again, Chris.

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Kevin Hughes

01/21/2025

CPlatt,
The twist at the end made me laugh outloud. I bet a lot more Writers would meet their "deadlines" if that fella showed up. And the line about : "Let's just say the answer is in the question." Wonderful.

Smiles, Kevin

CPlatt,
The twist at the end made me laugh outloud. I bet a lot more Writers would meet their "deadlines" if that fella showed up. And the line about : "Let's just say the answer is in the question." Wonderful.

Smiles, Kevin

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CPlatt

01/22/2025

I have written a few similar, I love the idea of the muse coming along demanding you write your story. Thanks so much for your comments, Kevin. Really appreciated as always.

I have written a few similar, I love the idea of the muse coming along demanding you write your story. Thanks so much for your comments, Kevin. Really appreciated as always.

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