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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Family & Friends
- Subject: Comedy / Humor
- Published: 01/31/2025
Egyptian Dog (Part I)
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"Ughhhhh! What a long day, Zara... Flick the lights off please if you can Zara"
It was nine, and my owners, Zara and Olive, were preparing for bed. Zara was wearing her nightgown, while Olive was already in bed, yawning with his pajamas on. I sighed and walked around my owner's bed and lay on the fuzzy carpet before curling up.
"Olive. You aren't a worm! You can do it yourself!"
"But I'm in bed already!" Olive argued, "And you are standing and about to go in so you should be flicking it off!"
"Shut up. You can flick it off yourself and I'm doing my nightly skin therapy you lazy poo!"
"Oh, you helpless little worm" Olive screamed, "Night, night! Don't let the bed bugs bite!"
I sighed louder and heard Zara's pathetic little "Humph!" from the next room. I was used to being ignored like that whenever they screamed at each other. They are two, big scruffy adults who love messing with each other like that.
In case you haven't read my first story, I'm Bailey, a tiny golden retriever with big golden fur and big, bright dog eyes that glimmer in the light. I live with my two owners, Zara and Olive. They're excellent owners and even though they usually fight with each other, it didn't stop us from living together as a happy family.
Zara stomped angrily into her bedroom in her bunny-styled nightgown and fluffy slippers with fluffy rabbit ears poking out. Her big, angry eyes were gleaming with fury below her big, fluffy, and pink rabbit ear cosmetic headband. As she stomped into the room, her eyes caught me and that big angry frown suddenly turned into a tired smile. She then walked over to me and I yapped happily as she stroked me.
"Who is my baby boy? Who's my baby boy?" Zara cooed. I yapped and rolled on my back to let her have a tummy rub, "Who's my little Bailey Baby Babe?"
"Lower your voice down, Bumblebee" Olive mumbled behind the sheets as he flipped his body.
"I don't care" Zara snapped sleepily, "By the way, you aren't even sleeping!"
I heard Olive's small giggle muffled through the sheets followed by another of Zara's "Humph!" before she slid into the sheets. She smiled and whispered, "Night Bailey Baby" before pouring the sheets over her head.
I looked at my owners in the dark. Not long later, loud and heavy snores rang the whole room down. I shook my head and exited the room.
I went into the moonlit living room and looked out into the night sky through the window. A big moon shone through the clouds that muffled its light and a sky, sprinkled with small stars lay behind the moon, accompanying the lonely moon. The night was just too perfect. I can't imagine another night more perfect and more beautiful than this. As I was about to deeply admire the night, a black shadow in the sky caught my eye.
Sat bemused, I squirmed over to the window to try and get a better look at this mysterious shadow. The shadow was surprisingly approaching me closer and closer with each second. Little by little, I can make out what this thing is.
A flying car.
I yelped in surprise as the car charged closer. When it charged close enough, I could make out who was in the car! Skylar, the most beautiful pup I've ever seen (also my girlfriend), and Hot, my best friend who was a cool Rottweiler. I wailed in surprise as they came charging down at the garden. The car came down and scraped the green grass that was smothered in dew. I stood up and opened the window and jumped out.
I stared, open-mouthed as I surveyed the scene. The car was above the grass and had destroyed the nicely kept garden of my owners while a cool Skylar and Hot were sitting inside the car, looking smugly at me.
"What's up, bro?" Hot laughed (it came out as a bark)
"Shush! Keep your voices down! You'll wake Olive and Zara up you brainless mutt!" I barked. Hot laughed as I looked at the grass, being squashed by the wheel of the car, "But you destroyed Zara's garden! She'll kill me for sure! No offense"
"Nah, ignore her" Hot laughed, "I'll blame it on Aunty Alice's car. She owned this car anyways"
I laughed weakly and Skylar smiled dryly.
"Well, never mind about the garden or the car. We came here to pick you up" Skylar said
"What for?" I asked, "I don't want to cause trouble, but pray tell me"
"You see here" Hot began, "We're planning to have a little trip to Egypt"
"Trip to Egypt?!" I laughed, "You're nuts!"
"Of course, I'm not nuts" Hot laughed with annoyance, "We don't need any air tickets, by the way! I borrowed Aunty Alice's car and it is a flying car! So no worries about air ticket fees! And this car can travel up to a few hundred miles per minute so by the time we come back, it's dawn! Way before Zara and Olive wakes up"
"Not sure but I'll go for sure!" I said gamely, "Anything I need to bring along?"
"Just a hat and a flashlight" Hot boomed back, "But I already pack some extras so you can hop aboard! C'mon! Quick before it's too late!"
I shook my head before opening a door and climbing in. As I fastened my seatbelt, Hot cried, "Are we ready?"
"Yes, we are!" Skylar and I cried back
"Then let's go!" Hot boomed. He placed his paws on the steering wheel and turned it without hesitation. He then pushed the accelerator and the car flew into the sky.
No sooner, the car was in the sky. I knew Hot didn't get his driver's license yet because the car was "shaking" and "tumbling" in the sky rather than flying in the sky. I held my paws onto the seat as he "flew" naughtily in the sky.
Even though I felt sick, Skylar and Hot were definitely enjoying it. They were going "WOOHOO!" when the car did a loop-the-loop!
When the car finally settled in a stable flying condition, I sighed with relief and cried, "Hot, did you have your driving license yet? Or more like a flying license?"
"Guess not" Skylar mused, "He's a naughty dog and is way too lazy to learn"
"Shut up," Hot said, his face turning red, "The truth hurts"
I laughed (it came out as a bark) as the car flew through the thick clouds. We were on the way... to Egypt...
[...]
After a few minutes of flying (in case you're wondering, this car can fly a few hundred miles per minute), I finally woke up from my sleep. I yawned and said, "Are we nearly there yet?"
"Not nearly but we're there already," Hot said from the driver's seat, "Even though we're in Egypt, I can't see the pyramids yet. It's very peculiar"
"Oh we're there already" Skylar yawned (she also fell asleep along the way), "How do you know?"
"By the sand" Hot replied, "Even though it's Egypt, I can't see the pyramids yet"
"There it is, you brainless mutt" Skylar yawned, pointing at some yellow "spikes" poking out from the ground in the distance, "I say, let's land near the pyramids, but don't land near those traveling folks. If they question us, we're doomed because I didn't get a visa to go to Egypt yet"
"You're joking, Skylar," I said gloomily, "If I told that to Zara then she'll kill me for sure"
"Don't care about her" Hot said, "Tell nothing to her or I'll smash you, lad"
I shook my head and chuckled and then I realized I hadn't got breakfast yet.
"Hey dude" I began, "I'm starving 'cause I haven't got breakfast yet"
"Don't feel uncool dude" Hot laughed, "I snuck some Cheerios from Aunty Alice's cupboard of food! Tada! Ain't I a cool dude?"
"You naughty pooch!" I laughed as I ripped open the box of Cheerios that Hot handed over to me. I ate hungrily as Hot chuckled. One moment Hot's face was smug and the next moment, it was a worried face.
"What's wrong, bro?" I asked
"WE'RE CRASHING INTO THE PYRAMID!!!" Hot cried. Skylar yelped and shouted, "Mayday, Mayday, Mayday! We're crashing into the pyramids! HELP US!"
I looked out the front window and indeed, we were going to crash into the sandy pyramid. I then looked at the side window and saw a few travelers noticing us and pointing at us. I cried, "THEY SAW US" and we three screamed. It's the end!
Or is it? Tune in with me to find out what happens next!
To be continued...
Egyptian Dog (Part I)(Rachel)
"Ughhhhh! What a long day, Zara... Flick the lights off please if you can Zara"
It was nine, and my owners, Zara and Olive, were preparing for bed. Zara was wearing her nightgown, while Olive was already in bed, yawning with his pajamas on. I sighed and walked around my owner's bed and lay on the fuzzy carpet before curling up.
"Olive. You aren't a worm! You can do it yourself!"
"But I'm in bed already!" Olive argued, "And you are standing and about to go in so you should be flicking it off!"
"Shut up. You can flick it off yourself and I'm doing my nightly skin therapy you lazy poo!"
"Oh, you helpless little worm" Olive screamed, "Night, night! Don't let the bed bugs bite!"
I sighed louder and heard Zara's pathetic little "Humph!" from the next room. I was used to being ignored like that whenever they screamed at each other. They are two, big scruffy adults who love messing with each other like that.
In case you haven't read my first story, I'm Bailey, a tiny golden retriever with big golden fur and big, bright dog eyes that glimmer in the light. I live with my two owners, Zara and Olive. They're excellent owners and even though they usually fight with each other, it didn't stop us from living together as a happy family.
Zara stomped angrily into her bedroom in her bunny-styled nightgown and fluffy slippers with fluffy rabbit ears poking out. Her big, angry eyes were gleaming with fury below her big, fluffy, and pink rabbit ear cosmetic headband. As she stomped into the room, her eyes caught me and that big angry frown suddenly turned into a tired smile. She then walked over to me and I yapped happily as she stroked me.
"Who is my baby boy? Who's my baby boy?" Zara cooed. I yapped and rolled on my back to let her have a tummy rub, "Who's my little Bailey Baby Babe?"
"Lower your voice down, Bumblebee" Olive mumbled behind the sheets as he flipped his body.
"I don't care" Zara snapped sleepily, "By the way, you aren't even sleeping!"
I heard Olive's small giggle muffled through the sheets followed by another of Zara's "Humph!" before she slid into the sheets. She smiled and whispered, "Night Bailey Baby" before pouring the sheets over her head.
I looked at my owners in the dark. Not long later, loud and heavy snores rang the whole room down. I shook my head and exited the room.
I went into the moonlit living room and looked out into the night sky through the window. A big moon shone through the clouds that muffled its light and a sky, sprinkled with small stars lay behind the moon, accompanying the lonely moon. The night was just too perfect. I can't imagine another night more perfect and more beautiful than this. As I was about to deeply admire the night, a black shadow in the sky caught my eye.
Sat bemused, I squirmed over to the window to try and get a better look at this mysterious shadow. The shadow was surprisingly approaching me closer and closer with each second. Little by little, I can make out what this thing is.
A flying car.
I yelped in surprise as the car charged closer. When it charged close enough, I could make out who was in the car! Skylar, the most beautiful pup I've ever seen (also my girlfriend), and Hot, my best friend who was a cool Rottweiler. I wailed in surprise as they came charging down at the garden. The car came down and scraped the green grass that was smothered in dew. I stood up and opened the window and jumped out.
I stared, open-mouthed as I surveyed the scene. The car was above the grass and had destroyed the nicely kept garden of my owners while a cool Skylar and Hot were sitting inside the car, looking smugly at me.
"What's up, bro?" Hot laughed (it came out as a bark)
"Shush! Keep your voices down! You'll wake Olive and Zara up you brainless mutt!" I barked. Hot laughed as I looked at the grass, being squashed by the wheel of the car, "But you destroyed Zara's garden! She'll kill me for sure! No offense"
"Nah, ignore her" Hot laughed, "I'll blame it on Aunty Alice's car. She owned this car anyways"
I laughed weakly and Skylar smiled dryly.
"Well, never mind about the garden or the car. We came here to pick you up" Skylar said
"What for?" I asked, "I don't want to cause trouble, but pray tell me"
"You see here" Hot began, "We're planning to have a little trip to Egypt"
"Trip to Egypt?!" I laughed, "You're nuts!"
"Of course, I'm not nuts" Hot laughed with annoyance, "We don't need any air tickets, by the way! I borrowed Aunty Alice's car and it is a flying car! So no worries about air ticket fees! And this car can travel up to a few hundred miles per minute so by the time we come back, it's dawn! Way before Zara and Olive wakes up"
"Not sure but I'll go for sure!" I said gamely, "Anything I need to bring along?"
"Just a hat and a flashlight" Hot boomed back, "But I already pack some extras so you can hop aboard! C'mon! Quick before it's too late!"
I shook my head before opening a door and climbing in. As I fastened my seatbelt, Hot cried, "Are we ready?"
"Yes, we are!" Skylar and I cried back
"Then let's go!" Hot boomed. He placed his paws on the steering wheel and turned it without hesitation. He then pushed the accelerator and the car flew into the sky.
No sooner, the car was in the sky. I knew Hot didn't get his driver's license yet because the car was "shaking" and "tumbling" in the sky rather than flying in the sky. I held my paws onto the seat as he "flew" naughtily in the sky.
Even though I felt sick, Skylar and Hot were definitely enjoying it. They were going "WOOHOO!" when the car did a loop-the-loop!
When the car finally settled in a stable flying condition, I sighed with relief and cried, "Hot, did you have your driving license yet? Or more like a flying license?"
"Guess not" Skylar mused, "He's a naughty dog and is way too lazy to learn"
"Shut up," Hot said, his face turning red, "The truth hurts"
I laughed (it came out as a bark) as the car flew through the thick clouds. We were on the way... to Egypt...
[...]
After a few minutes of flying (in case you're wondering, this car can fly a few hundred miles per minute), I finally woke up from my sleep. I yawned and said, "Are we nearly there yet?"
"Not nearly but we're there already," Hot said from the driver's seat, "Even though we're in Egypt, I can't see the pyramids yet. It's very peculiar"
"Oh we're there already" Skylar yawned (she also fell asleep along the way), "How do you know?"
"By the sand" Hot replied, "Even though it's Egypt, I can't see the pyramids yet"
"There it is, you brainless mutt" Skylar yawned, pointing at some yellow "spikes" poking out from the ground in the distance, "I say, let's land near the pyramids, but don't land near those traveling folks. If they question us, we're doomed because I didn't get a visa to go to Egypt yet"
"You're joking, Skylar," I said gloomily, "If I told that to Zara then she'll kill me for sure"
"Don't care about her" Hot said, "Tell nothing to her or I'll smash you, lad"
I shook my head and chuckled and then I realized I hadn't got breakfast yet.
"Hey dude" I began, "I'm starving 'cause I haven't got breakfast yet"
"Don't feel uncool dude" Hot laughed, "I snuck some Cheerios from Aunty Alice's cupboard of food! Tada! Ain't I a cool dude?"
"You naughty pooch!" I laughed as I ripped open the box of Cheerios that Hot handed over to me. I ate hungrily as Hot chuckled. One moment Hot's face was smug and the next moment, it was a worried face.
"What's wrong, bro?" I asked
"WE'RE CRASHING INTO THE PYRAMID!!!" Hot cried. Skylar yelped and shouted, "Mayday, Mayday, Mayday! We're crashing into the pyramids! HELP US!"
I looked out the front window and indeed, we were going to crash into the sandy pyramid. I then looked at the side window and saw a few travelers noticing us and pointing at us. I cried, "THEY SAW US" and we three screamed. It's the end!
Or is it? Tune in with me to find out what happens next!
To be continued...
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Denise Arnault
02/02/2025Very inventive story Rachel. I love how you describe the thoughts of the dogs as they interact. There are always a few grammer mistakes in your stories, caused by the translation I'm sure, but I think that you are getting better and better at adding in both descriptions and dialogue with each one you write.
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