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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Kids
- Theme: Horror
- Subject: Horror / Scary
- Published: 12/15/2025
The lost soul
Born 2016, U, from Dallas,Texas, United StatesMaya and her family went in a haunted house on Halloween to have some fun. They go explore the haunted house and find many cool things like spider webs and skeletons. A few hours later they get separated and are in completely different places. Maya saw a creepy room that said "KEEP OUT ", but she went in anyway. She saw a dead body and was freaked out and she was ready to scream, but was also ready to find the culprit because she found out it was her uncle who died a few years ago. She loved her uncle and was willing to find who killed her uncle. She told her family ,but the only person who believed her was her brother Luke. Usually Luke was the only one who didn't believe anything Maya said , But this time he was willing to trust his sister for once. They asked the worker how many people went in there and he said 3 people went in there and never returned , and it was said that the people who died in the room have been haunted for life. They decided to crawl inside the room and after a few hours of nonstop crawling they came across a stream. They found a person with a knife and they thought that the was the culprit. The man was killed and was sent to jail. They were confused because the worker said that whoever went in never returned . They never found their parents and went to sleep. The very next day there was a creepy old woman which kept saying "I see you ,you want to play hide and seek" in a creepy voice.In their opinion she looked like a witch plus vampire. They played in a house nearby the stream and sometimes the old lady said that " Hide in a good place or else prepare to lose your soul ". One day eventually the sibling lost their soul. Little did they know it was just a dream.
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Denise Arnault
12/19/2025You did a good job of laying out your plot in this story. I see that you have only just started writing here. I find that the more stories I write the better they get.
One thing that would make your story more interesting is if you would find a way to have your characters say something to each other. This makes the story more fun to read.
I hope that you will post more stories here.
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Kankana Kriti
12/16/2025A story about two siblings, Maya and Luke, who go on a spooky adventure in a haunted house. The twist at the end, where it's revealed that it's all just a dream, adds a interesting layer to the story !
Maya and Luke's haunted house adventure takes a dark turn when they discover a "dead body" that looks like their uncle. As they try to solve the mystery, they experience strange and frightening situations. But in the end, it all turns out to be just a dream.
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