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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Crime
- Published: 09/17/2013
Who is it?
Born 2000, F, from Drarga, Morocco-image(297x285-crop).jpg)
I was lonely in the dark room, it was a power failure, I was scared, what can I do? Just then, there was a scream, a woman's scream, I ran towards it and found a...a body full of blood and a woman sitting flat with the wall, she was pale.
"What happened?" I asked her.
"I came home from work and this man told me to go inside this room, he was wearing a mask so I don't know who he is...and," she couldn't finish off.
"Do you know him?" I asked. She shook her head. I looked closer at the body, someone must have hit him with something hard on the head. I called the police and the ambulance, they arrived after 3 minutes, I told the woman to stay close so she can tell the police what had happened because she is a suspect and that I'm one too.
The police examine the body and ask me and the woman lots of questions.
"This man has been hit with a metal rail, have you not seen anyone coming in here?" the policeman asked, we both shook our head. They made sure that we're not the ones that murdered and went away.
A week had passed and I was in the Café. I heard a scream, 'what can it be this time?' I thought, people ran towards the scream and I ran too. I stopped in the doorway when I saw the scary sight, this time, it was a woman, she was covered in blood, a lady was on the floor and she was blue. I helped her stand up.
"What happened?" I asked.
"This man told me to come in here and i found this!" she started crying.
The police and the ambulance came and asked many people questions. just then, I noticed a man that seemed suspicious, out of his pocket stuck out something black. I pretended to stand close and pulled it out, it was a mask, I ran towards the police and gave them the mask and showed them who the person was that had it, the police called him in a different room and asked him questions. After the man knew that he had no choice, he gave up.
"I hate women and so I make them die of fright when they see the body," the murderer said. he also said that if he wasn't captured, he would carry on murdering. The police gave me a reward and from that day people know me as detective girl.
Who is it?(Khadija)
I was lonely in the dark room, it was a power failure, I was scared, what can I do? Just then, there was a scream, a woman's scream, I ran towards it and found a...a body full of blood and a woman sitting flat with the wall, she was pale.
"What happened?" I asked her.
"I came home from work and this man told me to go inside this room, he was wearing a mask so I don't know who he is...and," she couldn't finish off.
"Do you know him?" I asked. She shook her head. I looked closer at the body, someone must have hit him with something hard on the head. I called the police and the ambulance, they arrived after 3 minutes, I told the woman to stay close so she can tell the police what had happened because she is a suspect and that I'm one too.
The police examine the body and ask me and the woman lots of questions.
"This man has been hit with a metal rail, have you not seen anyone coming in here?" the policeman asked, we both shook our head. They made sure that we're not the ones that murdered and went away.
A week had passed and I was in the Café. I heard a scream, 'what can it be this time?' I thought, people ran towards the scream and I ran too. I stopped in the doorway when I saw the scary sight, this time, it was a woman, she was covered in blood, a lady was on the floor and she was blue. I helped her stand up.
"What happened?" I asked.
"This man told me to come in here and i found this!" she started crying.
The police and the ambulance came and asked many people questions. just then, I noticed a man that seemed suspicious, out of his pocket stuck out something black. I pretended to stand close and pulled it out, it was a mask, I ran towards the police and gave them the mask and showed them who the person was that had it, the police called him in a different room and asked him questions. After the man knew that he had no choice, he gave up.
"I hate women and so I make them die of fright when they see the body," the murderer said. he also said that if he wasn't captured, he would carry on murdering. The police gave me a reward and from that day people know me as detective girl.
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Andre Michael Pietroschek
05/02/2022The story and idea are good. Still, the writing style could benefit from some more training and cultivation. Thanks for sharing.
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