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- Story Listed as: Fiction For Teens
- Theme: Mystery
- Subject: Revenge / Poetic Justice / Karma
- Published: 03/17/2015
TemperaMENTAL
Born 2002, M, from Dubai, United Arab EmiratesThe story revolves around a young man in New York.
Trey and Terrance are brothers living with their parents in New York. Their father is an executive for the New York times and their mother is a housewife. All goes good in their family except the fact that Terrance, being 5 years elder to Trey always picks on him which has turned him crazy. Even complaining to his parents has not helped as they never did anything to Terrance.
About 5 years later, Trey has grown into a fine 12 year old boy, and one day, as Trey was watching TV at home, Terrance comes home from his friend's house. Trey tells him that their mother had just gone out and is very angry at him for going without asking her. Terrance gets angry and switches off the TV, removes his belt and begins to beat Trey badly. He then pulls Trey up and pushes him. Trey hits a table and falls down and the glass vase on the table falls on his head, and he begins to bleed badly. In a fit of anger, he takes a deodorant lying on the table and sprays it on Terrance's face. The strong effect of the deo causes Terrance to fall down with an aching head. When he gets up, he sees his parents standing near by crying and reading a note. His mother begins to cry terribly and runs into the room. His father tries to console her and goes to her. Terrance goes up and takes the note. He reads it and it is revealed now that after Terrance fell down unconscious, Trey decided to run away from home. And so, he packed all his things and ran away along with 2 of his friends, Gordon and his best friend, Andy.
They, meanwhile, have reached the New York border and board a ship secretly and soon reach Chicago. They decide to spend the rest of their days there and begin to find jobs there. The years pass by, the 3 of the boys have grown up and are well-educated as well, as they joined small schools with the money they had. The 3 of them are without jobs and are still looking for jobs that they can get with their education. One day, on the street, The 3 of them see a young man bullying and troubling his younger brother. Then the elder boy pushes the younger one down on the road. Trey sees a truck coming by and tries to run and save the kid. He holds the kid and just as he is about to jump off the road, the truck hits them but not very hard. Trey hits his head on a metal beam and gets hurt and as for the boy, he is also quite injured. The both of them are taken to the hospital and after the treatment, they both say goodbye to each other. But Trey and his friends are simply not able to forget the incident as they had very similar incidents in their childhood which is responsible for their current position. They decide to punish all the elder siblings who trouble their younger ones as the trio is scared that those younger siblings may end up like them. They get a list of many such families who have these kind of siblings and find out there are exactly 223 of them and 150 of them are adults. They decide to kill all the elder siblings who are adults and make all the elder siblings who are below 18 suffer brutally.
The 3 of them begin the mission by kidnapping the elder brother who had pushed his brother on the road. The 3 of them kidnap the boy, Kennedy and slits his hand, feeds him a memory loss pill and returns him to his house. The next day, the parents of the boys give a complaint to the police and it becomes a public issue. The trio send an audio clip to the media and it is revealed that they have named their group "TemperaMENTAL" which depicts their anger (Temper) and their psycho-like (MENTAL) behaviour towards the mission. The day gets over and that night, they go for their next target, William, who tried to kill his brother so that he can get their father's property for himself, but failed in his attempt. They kidnap the man and take him to an abandoned factory near a railway track. The man is tied to a chair and is beaten up by the trio. Then they leave him and decide to kill him next morning. The next morning at around 4: 30 am, a bad rain takes place and a glass falls down and a sharp long piece bounces onto William's lap. Taking advantage, he slowly manages to push the glass to his hand and cuts open the rope. He tries to find a way out, but is spotted by Andy and Gordon who woke up due to the noise of the broken glass. They catch him and began to beat him. But he finds the glass piece he had used to cut the rope and stabs Andy and Gordon with it. Andy falls down dead and Gordon is severely injured. Trey hears the noise and goes there and is shocked to see his best friend dead. He attacks William and also gets stabbed. But being an extremely strong person, he manages to hold but falls down very hurt. William then notices a big ray of sunlight coming from one side of the room and realizes that it is the door. He runs out but just before he could reach the railway track, a train passes by. As he waits for the train to pass, he does not notice Trey running towards him with a completely torn shirt, a lot of injuries on him and a metal rod with a big and thick rock like-substance on the end. Trey hits William on the head and continues to beat him badly. Then the next day, the police gets involved with the case being handed over to officer Harry Bison. On his way out of the hospital, he dashes against a man in the room, who is revealed to be Trey, but as he does not know he is the killer, he leaves from there. Just then, a man lying on the right begins to point towards Trey but is not saying anything which makes Harry conclude the man is dumb. Then Harry turns towards Trey who jumps out of the window and lands on top of a car and escapes from there. It is now revealed that the when Trey was bashing William with the rod, the man in the hospital was on the door of the train and when Trey pulled his rod up. It hits the chin of the man who loses his balance and falls off the train in front of Trey, thus being the only witness to Trey's crime. As he does not want any witness to the crime and also does not want to simply kill the man, he unwillingly damages the man's throat, so that the man does not speak to reveal the killer and he also breaks his fingers so that the chances of getting a sketch done is also erased. Trey continues the murders in this manner and soon he is done with all the 150 murders. Meanwhile, Harry makes breakthrough in the case when he notices that all 150 murdered victims along with the 73 injured victims have younger siblings and that the killer probably has some hatred towards elder brothers. At the same time, Trey decides to murder his last victim i.e. his own brother as he considers justice equal for everyone. He finds and kidnaps Terrance when he was on a business meeting and keeps him in an old abandoned open spot exactly in the centre of the city when he suddenly sees the news stating that terrorists have taken over a building and have taken hostages and will blast the building. Trey notices that the building is right behind the empty park-like spot. Meanwhile, Terrance tries many times to escape but is unable to as Trey has made accurate planning in keeping him trapped. At the same time, Harry reaches the spot where the terrorists are. He begins to look around and sees something through the dense trees in that area. He goes through it with another junior officer and is surprised to find an injured Terrance there along with Trey. Harry at once realizes that Trey is the mysterious sibling killer as he is a family friend of Trey and Terrance and is well aware they are brothers. He tries to take out his pistol and aim it at Trey, but Trey takes a stone and hurls it at Harry's hand, which causes the pistol to fly of his hand and it gets lost among the trees. Then Harry gets into a brawl with Trey, but since Trey has more strength than Harry, he easily manages to defeat him. Harry, with the help of his junior and Terrance, finally manage to get a grip on Trey and fling him through the trees. Trey reaches the other side of the road i.e. outside the building where the terrorists are located and gets up. Just then, the younger brothers of 4 of his victims appear there, and they recognise him as the killer as they had followed Harry into the woods out of suspicion. The 4 of them begin to beat Trey badly and one of them in a fit of rage, throws an extremely injured Trey in through one of the windows. Trey tries to get up and escape, but as he has been terribly injured, he does not have any bit of energy left. But he still gets up and runs to the door of the building. Meanwhile, the head of the terrorists hears the noise and concludes that the cops have broken into the building and screaming loudly outside, he pushes the trigger of the bomb and the blast kills even Trey, who was just outside the building. As the blast was not huge and only burst some of the under floors of the building and spread not more than 5 metres across, many of the people get saved. Terrance begins to smile happily saying that the trouble is over, and in a fit of rage, Harry shoots Terrance's foot. That evening, an unknown person comes to Terrance's house and the police finalize that the killer was an associate of TemperaMENTAL. The next day, word of Trey's and Terrance's death goes around the town. Surprisingly, It is shown that Trey actually never died and that he had planned to escape in order to escape punishment and after he had come out of the building and the terrorist had triggered the bomb, he opened and jumped into a sewer he was standing on top of. Thus, he had escaped from there. It is also evident now that the one who killed Terrance was Trey himself. He begins to smile and closes a book titled TemperaMEMORIES and keeps it in a box and throws it into the garbage. He shifts out of NEW YORK and was never heard of again, but he still dreams of returning home some day to his family who he had put in a terrible condition.
TemperaMENTAL(Akshath Anoop)
The story revolves around a young man in New York.
Trey and Terrance are brothers living with their parents in New York. Their father is an executive for the New York times and their mother is a housewife. All goes good in their family except the fact that Terrance, being 5 years elder to Trey always picks on him which has turned him crazy. Even complaining to his parents has not helped as they never did anything to Terrance.
About 5 years later, Trey has grown into a fine 12 year old boy, and one day, as Trey was watching TV at home, Terrance comes home from his friend's house. Trey tells him that their mother had just gone out and is very angry at him for going without asking her. Terrance gets angry and switches off the TV, removes his belt and begins to beat Trey badly. He then pulls Trey up and pushes him. Trey hits a table and falls down and the glass vase on the table falls on his head, and he begins to bleed badly. In a fit of anger, he takes a deodorant lying on the table and sprays it on Terrance's face. The strong effect of the deo causes Terrance to fall down with an aching head. When he gets up, he sees his parents standing near by crying and reading a note. His mother begins to cry terribly and runs into the room. His father tries to console her and goes to her. Terrance goes up and takes the note. He reads it and it is revealed now that after Terrance fell down unconscious, Trey decided to run away from home. And so, he packed all his things and ran away along with 2 of his friends, Gordon and his best friend, Andy.
They, meanwhile, have reached the New York border and board a ship secretly and soon reach Chicago. They decide to spend the rest of their days there and begin to find jobs there. The years pass by, the 3 of the boys have grown up and are well-educated as well, as they joined small schools with the money they had. The 3 of them are without jobs and are still looking for jobs that they can get with their education. One day, on the street, The 3 of them see a young man bullying and troubling his younger brother. Then the elder boy pushes the younger one down on the road. Trey sees a truck coming by and tries to run and save the kid. He holds the kid and just as he is about to jump off the road, the truck hits them but not very hard. Trey hits his head on a metal beam and gets hurt and as for the boy, he is also quite injured. The both of them are taken to the hospital and after the treatment, they both say goodbye to each other. But Trey and his friends are simply not able to forget the incident as they had very similar incidents in their childhood which is responsible for their current position. They decide to punish all the elder siblings who trouble their younger ones as the trio is scared that those younger siblings may end up like them. They get a list of many such families who have these kind of siblings and find out there are exactly 223 of them and 150 of them are adults. They decide to kill all the elder siblings who are adults and make all the elder siblings who are below 18 suffer brutally.
The 3 of them begin the mission by kidnapping the elder brother who had pushed his brother on the road. The 3 of them kidnap the boy, Kennedy and slits his hand, feeds him a memory loss pill and returns him to his house. The next day, the parents of the boys give a complaint to the police and it becomes a public issue. The trio send an audio clip to the media and it is revealed that they have named their group "TemperaMENTAL" which depicts their anger (Temper) and their psycho-like (MENTAL) behaviour towards the mission. The day gets over and that night, they go for their next target, William, who tried to kill his brother so that he can get their father's property for himself, but failed in his attempt. They kidnap the man and take him to an abandoned factory near a railway track. The man is tied to a chair and is beaten up by the trio. Then they leave him and decide to kill him next morning. The next morning at around 4: 30 am, a bad rain takes place and a glass falls down and a sharp long piece bounces onto William's lap. Taking advantage, he slowly manages to push the glass to his hand and cuts open the rope. He tries to find a way out, but is spotted by Andy and Gordon who woke up due to the noise of the broken glass. They catch him and began to beat him. But he finds the glass piece he had used to cut the rope and stabs Andy and Gordon with it. Andy falls down dead and Gordon is severely injured. Trey hears the noise and goes there and is shocked to see his best friend dead. He attacks William and also gets stabbed. But being an extremely strong person, he manages to hold but falls down very hurt. William then notices a big ray of sunlight coming from one side of the room and realizes that it is the door. He runs out but just before he could reach the railway track, a train passes by. As he waits for the train to pass, he does not notice Trey running towards him with a completely torn shirt, a lot of injuries on him and a metal rod with a big and thick rock like-substance on the end. Trey hits William on the head and continues to beat him badly. Then the next day, the police gets involved with the case being handed over to officer Harry Bison. On his way out of the hospital, he dashes against a man in the room, who is revealed to be Trey, but as he does not know he is the killer, he leaves from there. Just then, a man lying on the right begins to point towards Trey but is not saying anything which makes Harry conclude the man is dumb. Then Harry turns towards Trey who jumps out of the window and lands on top of a car and escapes from there. It is now revealed that the when Trey was bashing William with the rod, the man in the hospital was on the door of the train and when Trey pulled his rod up. It hits the chin of the man who loses his balance and falls off the train in front of Trey, thus being the only witness to Trey's crime. As he does not want any witness to the crime and also does not want to simply kill the man, he unwillingly damages the man's throat, so that the man does not speak to reveal the killer and he also breaks his fingers so that the chances of getting a sketch done is also erased. Trey continues the murders in this manner and soon he is done with all the 150 murders. Meanwhile, Harry makes breakthrough in the case when he notices that all 150 murdered victims along with the 73 injured victims have younger siblings and that the killer probably has some hatred towards elder brothers. At the same time, Trey decides to murder his last victim i.e. his own brother as he considers justice equal for everyone. He finds and kidnaps Terrance when he was on a business meeting and keeps him in an old abandoned open spot exactly in the centre of the city when he suddenly sees the news stating that terrorists have taken over a building and have taken hostages and will blast the building. Trey notices that the building is right behind the empty park-like spot. Meanwhile, Terrance tries many times to escape but is unable to as Trey has made accurate planning in keeping him trapped. At the same time, Harry reaches the spot where the terrorists are. He begins to look around and sees something through the dense trees in that area. He goes through it with another junior officer and is surprised to find an injured Terrance there along with Trey. Harry at once realizes that Trey is the mysterious sibling killer as he is a family friend of Trey and Terrance and is well aware they are brothers. He tries to take out his pistol and aim it at Trey, but Trey takes a stone and hurls it at Harry's hand, which causes the pistol to fly of his hand and it gets lost among the trees. Then Harry gets into a brawl with Trey, but since Trey has more strength than Harry, he easily manages to defeat him. Harry, with the help of his junior and Terrance, finally manage to get a grip on Trey and fling him through the trees. Trey reaches the other side of the road i.e. outside the building where the terrorists are located and gets up. Just then, the younger brothers of 4 of his victims appear there, and they recognise him as the killer as they had followed Harry into the woods out of suspicion. The 4 of them begin to beat Trey badly and one of them in a fit of rage, throws an extremely injured Trey in through one of the windows. Trey tries to get up and escape, but as he has been terribly injured, he does not have any bit of energy left. But he still gets up and runs to the door of the building. Meanwhile, the head of the terrorists hears the noise and concludes that the cops have broken into the building and screaming loudly outside, he pushes the trigger of the bomb and the blast kills even Trey, who was just outside the building. As the blast was not huge and only burst some of the under floors of the building and spread not more than 5 metres across, many of the people get saved. Terrance begins to smile happily saying that the trouble is over, and in a fit of rage, Harry shoots Terrance's foot. That evening, an unknown person comes to Terrance's house and the police finalize that the killer was an associate of TemperaMENTAL. The next day, word of Trey's and Terrance's death goes around the town. Surprisingly, It is shown that Trey actually never died and that he had planned to escape in order to escape punishment and after he had come out of the building and the terrorist had triggered the bomb, he opened and jumped into a sewer he was standing on top of. Thus, he had escaped from there. It is also evident now that the one who killed Terrance was Trey himself. He begins to smile and closes a book titled TemperaMEMORIES and keeps it in a box and throws it into the garbage. He shifts out of NEW YORK and was never heard of again, but he still dreams of returning home some day to his family who he had put in a terrible condition.
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