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On The Day of Her Death

By Shirley Smothers
Born 1960, F, from San Antonio Texas, United States

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On The Day of Her Death

On the day of her death
He didn't cry.
Everyone said,
"He doesn't care.

On the day they laid
Her to rest
He didn't cry.
Everyone said,
"He never loved Her."

On the one month anniversary of
Her death he was found
Lying next to her grave.
An empty bottle of poison
In his hand.
A note that simply read,
"I can't live without her."

This the Man
"Who didn't care."
This the Man
"Who never loved her."

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Gerald R Gioglio

11/20/2023

Powerful piece. Happy storystar day, Shirley

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Shirley Smothers

11/21/2023

Thank you Gerald. Men have feelings but sometimes we as a society don't encourage them to show grief. Thank you again.

BEN BROWN

11/20/2023

A wonderful poem. Well done for being todays star.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you Ben. Not all show their grief. Depression can be a killer. Thank you again.

Mike

11/20/2023

A lot of times people don't know how something affects someone. People speak no matter what you do. Terrific poem. Highly relatable.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you Mike. No one knows the depth of another's grief or depression. Some are critical no matter what. Thank you again.

Lillian Kazmierczak

11/20/2023

So sad he died of a broken heart! Not everyone can let their emotions loose. Shirley, you wrote it beautifully! What a terrific poem. A well- deserved short story star of the day!

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you Lillian. Some don't know how to express emotion. Others don't know how to respond to another's grief. Thank you again.

Ayesha Binti Mahmud

11/20/2023

It's really beautifully written and crafted

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you Ayesha, I wanted to express that Men grieve and have depression just like everyone else. Thank you for your kind comments.

Daniel G

11/20/2023

Its hard to describe how potent this writing is. The laconic nature of the poem; short and carefully chosen prose and purposefully few on words ... created SUCH high impact. The lack of words reflected how he himself couldn't express his grief. So eloquently crafted and beautifully written.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you so much Daniel! I prefer to write shorter poems. Your words have my ego high. Thank you again

Aziz

11/20/2023

What deep grief!
It reflects deep faithfulness, though. The speculation of people seems to be usually false.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you Aziz. Grief is expected of Women but denied to Men. I wanted to express that Men grieve. We never know how deep someones depression really goes. Thank you again.

CPlatt

11/20/2023

Such a moving poem, Shirley. Congrats on star of the day.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you CPlatt. Grief and depression are often overlooked. Men have these and sometimes deeply felt. Thank you again.

JD

11/19/2023

Sad and thought provoking. Happy short story star of the day, Shirley.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you JD. Men are often expected to be stoic. But Mens grief and depression can be felt as deeply as Women's and more so. Thank you for choosing my Story.

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Shirley Smothers

11/20/2023

Thank you JD. Men are often expected to be stoic. But they grieve as deeply as Women sometimes more so. Thank you for choosing my Story.

Shelly Garrod

11/17/2023

Oh, wow Shirley, that was powerful. Loved it. I know this is fiction but in reality this happens way too often. Who are we to say how someone is feeling deep inside. Well done.
Blessings, Shelly

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Shirley Smothers

11/17/2023

Thank you Shelly. Everyone grieves in their own way. Some people are good at hiding their depression. You just never know.
Blessings to you.

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